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6/26/24, 4:16 AM
Great! Please add more!
2/14/24, 1:58 AM
Y’all are too kind. I’ve had this idea marinating in my head for a long time. The Mad Science prompt was the catalyst I needed to finally put it into words. By the way, this is the first erotic story I’ve ever written, and I’m absolutely blown away by the reception. Thank you to everyone.

6/26/24, 4:11 AM
@[Perpetually Erect](/user/show/10018717) Wow! Your first story and it was this good! You must be a regular writer outside of kink. If you need prompts I would be happy to give you some. or ideas
6/26/24, 3:12 AM
I too am keen for the next chapter asap!
6/26/24, 1:12 AM
This is an excellent story! You do a fantastic job setting up the main characters as despicable—especially when they plan to turn Dereck into a slave and steal everything from him—so it is very satisfying to see them fall victim to their own trap. An excellent karmic twist ending! One note, if I may, about word choice: a few times in the story you mention the characters massaging/feeling another man’s “breasts.” While men CAN have breasts, I think in this context you mean the chest muscles or nipples, so it may be better to use “pecs” (short for pectorals, the name for the chest muscles) in future stories. The tale is still incredible—wanted to make that small note. Thank you again and congratulations on your first story! :)

6/26/24, 3:03 AM
@[Feed Your Head](/user/show/1170832) Thanks a lot! The review is much appreciated, specially the pointers about wording. Will surely keep it in mind! :P
6/26/24, 2:10 AM
That was quite a story. Very hot
Gortontosh
6/26/24, 1:12 AM
Murr~ ♥️
6/25/24, 11:36 PM
Really well written Sir

6/26/24, 12:55 AM
@[FaggyBaby](/user/show/525906) Thanks, boy ;)
6/26/24, 12:25 AM
Loving this!
6/25/24, 11:06 PM
Gotta say, this 'part' didn't go as I thought it would. And I'm not saying that as a bad thing. Exploring the inner psyche and situation of our former hero was different then the usual pace of this series. And his 'relapse' was well done. It seemed so natural and casual for it to happen. Hank keeps showing he's got skills. It was how things ended at the base that was unexpected. I thought it would be more similar to the previous chapter. Yet having Nick taken and separated. And he ending up being trained into that rubber pup Hank wants him to be. And Rodriguez either being captured by Travis for something or even becoming the next Mister Freedom with Nick gone. Having Nick punch through the floor to escape was surprising. So hearing that there is a second half to this is exciting. The final say on how everyone ends up!

6/26/24, 12:24 AM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) I thought about making the base battle turn sour, but this had to be Henry's time to shine,... or, at least, to have some faith in himself. His experience and skill, rather than his super-powers, proved to be the game-changer this time around! Oh, and since you mentioned the 'punching through the floor' bit, that's also how Rodriquez and he had planned to escape the same trap in the bad ending,... only Henry wasn't there to disable the traps put in place to prevent it! This _was_ also supposed to be a quick and clean little ending where the boys win, go on a romantic break and,... well,... then Carl had to go and prove how much like his son he is! He turned into a real attention whore and stole a whole chunk of space! So, thanks to him, we now have one last little bit to go,... even Travis' little postlude got pushed back into part 2! Thanks for sharing your thoughts! I hope you like what's still to come in the finale,..
6/25/24, 11:20 PM
i love this story...want to experience what the former Danny is experiencing