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6/25/24, 9:36 PM
Eager to see the second part now.
6/25/24, 9:01 PM
Freaking hot story man !

6/25/24, 9:05 PM
@[six_dead106](/user/show/908628) thanks, got inspired after having had some chats with friends and decided today to write it after work
6/25/24, 7:03 PM
The story felt a bit rushed, but for a contest that's understandable. The idea is cool, but the tone was a bit odd. Rocco and Charles felt like they were two different people at different times. I think a thousand more words over the whole story might have helped. Wonder what was your inspiration

HypnoFreak
6/25/24, 8:45 PM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) Thank you for the feedback. I actually was thinking on writing two more chapters but figured out to just let it end here for now and continue in a new series maybe. And yes, I also did notice the slight weirdness in the characters of Charles and Rocco and while some of it was intended as a catch on for next chapters, some of it was really not intended. Maybe using POV would have solved the problem and I will definitely explore it if I do continue.
6/25/24, 5:36 PM
Loved to see the dom tops falling into their own trap hahaha. Nicely written, thanks for posting

6/25/24, 7:40 PM
@[BrGuy](/user/show/10033894) Thanks for reading! :)
mic
6/25/24, 6:49 PM
fucking hot, shrink more cocks, and his, invert it in chasity and fuck this hole too, make him a second pussy
Noo
6/25/24, 5:00 PM
Looking forward to the ending!
6/25/24, 3:27 PM
I’d love to see him turn Al totally slutty and gay. Or else maybe that’s gonna happen to Trevor next? Such a hot story bro!
6/25/24, 1:57 PM
Very well written! Became so horny while reading!

6/25/24, 2:39 PM
@[Nick Rivers](/user/show/10014837) I am glad you enjoyed it! :D
Anonymous
6/25/24, 1:56 PM
This was SUPER fucking hot btw. Loved it.
6/25/24, 1:48 PM
Okay,... preemptive disclaimer; I _had_ said that this would be the last chapter. **I was wrong.** I also thought this wouldn't be as long as the bad ending,... **I was wrong.** I hit the character limit and had to split this into two chunks, so,... give me a week or so and the final, final, last ending will be done! Thanks! (EDIT: Sick as hell, make that a couple of weeks,...)