Recent Comments

Zander
5/15/24, 6:01 PM
Thank you very much for the chapter. A story with potential for continuation.
5/15/24, 5:29 PM
I'm loving it. That's what I would do if I had my own ChatRPT :-) Keep this story going. Perhaps there will be some accidental orgasms in the future storyline (because of typos in ChatRPT).
5/14/24, 1:48 PM
This was rather annoying to read. The paragraph construction was too similar from each other. The repeated use of "stark reminder" Was too much across the entire thing, really. It would have been nice to see the gradual stripping of the slave's identity but the way you did it made it seem like he's just repeating himself instead of convincing himself (and us) that accepting it was the best way out.

5/15/24, 8:01 AM
@[Allan Weiss](/user/show/472888) Yeah, this is my first doing a story, so I am learning

5/15/24, 4:34 PM
@[Pup Mysterys](/user/show/10025504) I mean, it's great that you're willing to improve but those were the most glaring parts I found. If you do want to use the whole repeating/affirmation style, a good vehicle to convey that is the journal/diary/report format. Like have your MC write in a journal about his experiences and change minor things about the reports while the MC doesn't notice it. I.E: slowly no longer referring to themselves with anything but "It" across the entries, having them cross out certain words like names and info that are "wrong" And etc.
May 14, 2024
5/15/24, 2:29 PM
Very. Very. Hot.

Fred
5/15/24, 3:23 PM
@[JockTopper](/user/show/10015286) Thanks, man. Love your stories so muchm they get me off every time, your feedback means a lot
5/15/24, 12:34 AM
I am really starting to enjoy this story. Loving where this is going and that you are showing us the progression of things. I do wonder if you might post longer entries in the future.

5/15/24, 12:28 PM
@[Drake Nightstorm](/user/show/650184) Thanks for your reply! I do plan to make longer chapters. The next chapter should be about double the size of the first two.
May 14, 2024
5/15/24, 11:21 AM
I really enjoyed this one. I especially liked how you set it up using only dialogues. I’m a “sucker” for good fin-dom stories .👍

Fred
5/15/24, 11:37 AM
@[Cracker](/user/show/10023984) Hey, Cracker! Thanks, that means alot coming from you, love, love, your stories!

5/15/24, 11:40 AM
@Fred Thanks man. Pop me an email. Happy to exchange ideas in this genre. So few writers cover it. My email is listed with my stories.
5/15/24, 11:26 AM
Very enjoyable. Loved how you played the scenes out. Shaving and Kal-el parts had me on fire. I hope there’s a part three coming out soon too.
May 14, 2024
5/15/24, 10:53 AM
Really inventive. Pretty hot too.

Fred
5/15/24, 10:56 AM
@[Kyle Cicero](/user/show/10023983) Thank you!

Fred
5/15/24, 11:00 AM
@[Kyle Cicero](/user/show/10023983) just wanted to add, thank you- coming from you I really appreciate that dude! Love your stories too :-)

5/15/24, 11:12 AM
@Fred Hey thanks. I hope there are sequels.😉
May 14, 2024
5/15/24, 3:43 AM
Great story.

Fred
5/15/24, 10:52 AM
@[GiveInToTheMusk](/user/show/909380) Thanks!
5/13/24, 5:16 AM
Unique and detailed. Excited for more.

5/15/24, 8:03 AM
@[GiveInToTheMusk](/user/show/909380) Thank you, I am trying to my best on writing it out and making sure that it catches the readers attention!