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4/23/24, 2:38 AM
Congrats on finishing the series! Apologies if my comment on your previous chapter sounded harsh. Either way though I'm very satisfied with this ending and it left me with quite the hard on. like i said before 10/10. Eddie is one of the best written protagonists i've had the pleasure of reading in a while. I like how this ending puts everything in a full circle and kind of completes a character journey satisfyingly.

4/23/24, 3:14 AM
@[BlackJaxus](/user/show/10012672) No apologies necessary! I didn't take anything as an insult to my writing or storytelling, merely speaks to what you wish would happen! That's pretty standard fair. I'm just glad so many people find enjoyment out of my crazy-ass stories. Very happy to hear you feel like it's full circle for Eddie. Honestly, when it comes to Yufus, that's best he could have hoped for...I figure Yusuf didn't necessarily want to torment Eddie for the rest of his life; merely put someone he deemed 'ideal' in the eyes of normal society into a reality in which that 'ideal' is actually the 'weird, pervert'. Eddie just happened to be the guy Yusuf chose to do it too. Proximity, maybe...but also cuz he had hot sons that Yusuf wanted for himself :P

4/23/24, 3:49 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) And i get that! Yusuf is an understandable antagonist for this story and I'd do most of the things he'd do in his shoes... Though unlike Yusuf, I'm a bit more greedy and would own Eddie Berger myself, maybe make him have all his memories alongside his new fabricated ones and make him both delighted and disgusted to serve me. but that's my personal opinion i guess. In terms of the last chapter, i thought the last paragraphs was hinting mind erasure as Eddie's fate, or something similar, instead of the outcome shown in this epilogue, and Mind erasure is something i don't like for a story written like this. So it's me and my expectations being wrong so. I find Fred's fate very entertaining, I love buff, "alpha male" men that's worth nothing and are treated like absolute garbage. I also like that you took inspiration from Wesley Bracken's story too, i read it, and i had fun with it, but its so weird i barely made the connection that this story was directly inspired by it.

4/23/24, 3:56 AM
@[BlackJaxus](/user/show/10012672) I'm glad that it stands on it's own merits and isn't derivative of his amazing work. The last thing I wanna do is rip someone off...I'd even sent him an e-mail requesting permission to write a story inspired by his but never heard back, unfortunately. Knowing that it's not just his chapter on steroids is a relief, but definitely still wanna give him credit where it's due. This story started as the idea of the epilogue, then realized the inspiration I'd had from Wesley Bracken could work well with that...throw in the gloves as a 'Mad Scientist' invention, it just seemed like it was the right time to get this idea down on paper!

4/23/24, 4:46 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) Well good job! It really does stand on it's own merits and i enjoy the story very much.
4/23/24, 4:15 AM
I really loved the "trick the chip by offering a false dichotomy idea" especially!
DWK
4/23/24, 12:35 AM
Nothing here for me. Big disappointment.

4/23/24, 3:46 AM
@[DWK](/user/show/950736) Still got ya to comment so I’ll take that as a win 🥰
4/23/24, 3:35 AM
Edlam, another great story! I really love the corruption and manipulations in your stories. I love how you have both a mixture of deprave perversion, but at the same time, everyone gets what they wants/needs/deserves. There is also a level of hopefulness at the end that I enjoy. Even after everything, Yusuf still seems to have a soft spot of Eddie, even leaving an opportunity to corrupt him and make him part of the family by implying he keeps on erasing his memories waiting for him to change his own morals and give in. I look forward to reading more stories from you soon.
Anonymous
4/23/24, 3:27 AM
WOW! As a fellow fan of Asian men (and Asian bodybuilders), this was an AMAZING piece of work. This tale will definitely be on my “frequently read” for a long time!
Anonymous
4/23/24, 2:09 AM
Oh man this was such a great mix of slightly tongue-in-cheek humor, tender romance, and hot smut. it was very much a departure from your previous works but just as riveting!
Maximus
4/21/24, 10:20 PM
Interesting.

4/22/24, 11:42 PM
@[Maximus](/user/show/789098) Thank you 🙂
Zander
4/22/24, 11:21 PM
Thanks again for sharing your story, your work is some of the best on this site. But, unfortunately, the last chapter for me personally lacked the WOW effect (cliffhanger) in the plot. Perhaps my expectations in this regard were too exaggerated, so I was looking forward to the epilogue. And it’s not for nothing that they say that readers’ expectations are his own problems).
Zander
4/22/24, 11:16 PM
Thanks for the story. One of the darkest, erotic and sad stories on the site. The ending is left open, which I like (since each reader can end the story the way they want) and + it gives a window for continuation. I really liked the character of Eddie, a tragic character and very well written, unlike Yusuf (whom you don’t sympathize with at all) and you want to die, like Joffrey in “Game of Thrones”. I liked the fact that you kept Eddie as a person with a good heart who wouldn't do things like Yusuf did, and that says a lot about the character as an individual that I have a lot of respect for. Personally for me this epilogue seemed to be the end of season 1) or arc. I hope someone or you will someday be inspired to continue this story. As a result, for now I can give this part of the story a 6.8 I slightly increased the rating because the character of Eddie was better shown, developed and evoked sympathy in an erotic story (which is rare) The epilogue lacked a Cliffhanger and if the city had been captured and changed, it is obvious that the authorities of the State and the country would have known this, because the population of the town cannot help but behave strangely and not arouse suspicion in the rest of the world, not to mention relatives (which entails a lot of questions) Although I know that in an erotic porn story you shouldn’t focus too much on this because the logic in such stories is, to put it mildly, lame 🤣. I'm also looking forward to the continuation of your last story)
4/22/24, 11:06 PM
The one thing that kind of annoys me in an otherwise fun superhero sex romp is the assumption that bottoms have small dicks and tops have big ones. I don't know if that's a kink (if so, fine; not mine, but ydy) or a very weird take on gay sex. I personally love a big, hard dick flopping around when a bottom is being pounded, to show and make clear how much they're loving it.