This could have gone on like "Top Dawg" or "Parker Brothers". You've even worked an "Eden" reference in there. Great work!

Is this a reupload? Or did you post this elsewhere a while ago? Cause I've definitely read this before

One of my favorite authors and some of my favorite stories with answers to all questions and a great plot, unexpected turns, events and eroticism). I wish there were more authors like you.

A very good porno-erotic story with a bad ending. Cons: 1. It's unlikely that Yusuf's trio of twins would be able to catch up with Caleb. 2. This is the main villain of the story, Yusuf (who supposedly, in his words, wanted a family and to be happy). Very weak and stupid motivation! No one forced you not to start a family and not be happy, right? this was not mentioned in the story. After all, everyone builds their own happiness and destiny because everything is always in the hands of a person who builds his own destiny. I don't think that by enslaving someone else's family and betraying their minds, you will actually be happy about it (because you know that without your intervention in their minds this would not have happened and they would never have loved you. Although I think that Yusufu in fact, he doesn’t give a damn about it and he knows it, because he is a very big hypocrite and selfish and stupid too, unfortunately (because an intelligent person is unlikely to control the consciousness of every person he likes, and even more so by physically changing his appearance, because this will be very noticeable). After all, luck is not a constant thing. and luck will not always favor you and the glove may either break, or not work at the right moment, or something else may happen that the glove may not help him and then Yusuf will come to a natural end. Although the story will most likely end with the natural “victory” of Yusuf. In the future, I think he will have huge problems, because there is such a thing as Karma, and it always comes back. Let's not forget that you will never build happiness on the grief and suffering of others, and the evil you create will come back to you later. As a character and a villain, I don't like Yusuf because he is very stupid and poorly written. It's strange that he was able to invent such an invention, but could not have his own family who truly loved him. Honestly, who could help Yusuf with this invention? maybe some demon gave him the drawings of this invention in a dream. In short, I'm looking forward to the continuation of this story in the form of an epilogue and hope that it answers all the questions in the story. Oh yeah, I almost forgot about Eddie, I feel really bad for him as a character (losing his entire family on Thanksgiving) but I believe that Karma will punish Yusuf at some point in the future. I just hope that the epilogue tells us about all the characters and what happened to them next.

I loved the story, but honestly, this ending wasn't for me. I do hope this isn't the final chapter, as the story being left off here, for me, would be incredibly unsatisfying, to my tastes of course. Everyone else seems to like it, and I'm glad that's the case and the writing is good. However to me, if it left off here, or it turns out Eddie's mind is erased, and his body is a brainless husk of some sort, then my personal interest and love for this story before would be gone, as it end off feeling like torture porn, and that the main character is made to suffer for the sake of suffering. I actually genuinely like Eddie, as even before and after being rewritten, he was genuinely a good guy doing what's right, and he's made to suffer for it, and be punished on top of his suffering. It also feels weird to me that it's been hinted so many times that Yusuf wants Eddie, but most choices he make are made to spite and alienate him, and I now understand the character motivation as stated in this chapter, but it still doesn't feel satisfying because Eddie still wasn't part of the family, and the Eddie Wasfi stuff ended up more punishing to read, as it felt like there's no possible way for him to ever be happy now. I'll hold out for the epilogue, as i think there's still plans for this story. Don't get me wrong, I don't want a perfect ending, or a "Eddie saves the day," kind of plot, I quite enjoy these kinds of stories, and bittersweet ending and bad endings are my favorite things, especially endings where a family or person changes and they all fuck in an eternal lust frenzy, a shadow of their former selves. But this wasn't it for me, and in the end, the story was hard to personally enjoy because of the pain and suffering the protagonist was put through in the last seconds. ~~My personal preferred ending would be something along the lines of Eddie being Yusuf's wife after all this or something.~~ Anyways 10/10, good writing. It's great. The protagonist is one of the best i've seen in this site and I'll be personally mourning him if in the epilogue he's brain dead, or a drone or something like that. Also i like Yusuf and especially like the scene of Eddie changing his father. If this story was meant to be a tragedy of any sort, you did an amazing job! If it was a just a horny story, its fucking fantastic! All my negative feelings we're just personal taste so please dont take this as me criticizing your work.

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I love this story about how well written the step by step is... I dedicated about 5 or more to the third part... I feel like they caught me and I'm turning into a rubber robot... congratulations rubbery for your work They are one of my favorites

This is hot as fuck.

WELL DONE. I WANT TO READ WHAT HAPPENS NEXT...

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