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4/9/24, 9:37 PM
Onyx embezzled from the League? I think that raises questions on what Onyx's original power was. . . I think of it as interesting
4/9/24, 8:49 PM
Great beginning! Please continue if you ever have the time for it! :)
4/9/24, 8:07 PM
So fucking hot, this entire series. I imagine myself as Kevin, as Sirs faggot slut. Being trained and dominated. Amazing! Love it
4/9/24, 6:47 PM
Been looking forward to this update and it’s definitely worth the wait! Really, REALLY love the continuation of Dunc’s cum-lock and the effects it has on his psyche and overall obedience. I just love athletic jocks being teased and edged like this. Young jocks are usually virile and sexually active, and so for someone like Dunc to be depraved and totally controlled in such a way is just completely titillating to me. And you do such a great job in capturing Dunc’s frustrated thoughts and feelings during his cum-lock ordeal. Personally, I wouldn’t mind if Dunc stays like this, he can be a lax-bro fuck toy, a living dildo who doesn’t ejaculate haha. At the very least, I hope Mr. Mandrake keeps his ejaculations at a very bare minimum and it kinda make sense narratively too, since lax-bros are probably more obedient the more horny and frustrated they are! The stuff with the wrestlers are also quite interesting too, btw, but Dunc’s cum-lock journey is definitely the star of the show for me. Anyway, really awesome chapter once again and thank you for posting for us. It’s been such a TREAT!
4/9/24, 4:44 PM
Great story and when u get the step brothers involved it can go anywhere hope u continue it
4/9/24, 4:22 PM
Great start! Love your stories
4/9/24, 3:33 PM
Very well executed and HOT! I loved the changes happening one at a time, and the mental change at the end was the icing on the cake.
Apr 6, 2024
4/9/24, 1:04 PM
This was fantastic, really enjoyed the images to go with the story, they helped to visualise it. And the changes were very hot. Great work!

4/9/24, 1:16 PM
@[Growing Geek](/user/show/129818) Thank you! I am glad you liked it :)
4/9/24, 5:21 AM
Some great plot twists in this epilogue! I especially liked how you brought back Tucker from the original FanTCDude story at the end--it felt like a post-credits scene from a Marvel movie. I do wish we'd gotten a bit more mental transformation stuff in the last couple of chapters to help set up these endings; it felt like the action suddenly ramped into overdrive, and we didn't get as many of those character psychology moments you do so well.

4/9/24, 11:36 AM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) > it felt like a post-credits scene from a Marvel movie. That was what I was going for. I should've labeled it better... As to the main body of your comment -- I agree. This is a result of "Pantsing" -- making it up as you go along. I realized suddenly that I was at the end of what I wanted to do with the "plot" and even though I could've squeezed out another couple of chapters, personally, I'm ready to move on. It's been 3 months with this story -- I really want to get to my next project. For the middle movie of the trilogy, it's not bad. I feel like I got good traction at the end. I've left most of these stories open-ended in case I want to jump in and do something with them (one-shots or something) -- we'll see. Not my best, far from my worst. At least I see a future for the franchise.

4/9/24, 12:58 PM
@[absman420](/user/show/162063) I'm the same way when it comes to writing longer stories. I start off doing the slow build with simmering tension, but at some point I just want to finish the damn story already, and so sometimes I'll speed things up towards the end. (My cardinal sin is fast-forwarding through sex scenes, since I don't find them very interesting to write).