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4/9/24, 4:54 AM
I loved this! Shifting perspectives over the course of a 3000 word story doesn't always work, but it totally paid off here and only added to the sense of suspense and anticipation. I can see all kinds of ways that you might continue this story--maybe from the perspective of a friend who doesn't understand why Chris and Steven are acting so differently and have suddenly joined ROTC. I hope you do!

4/9/24, 5:36 AM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) Thank you, it's good to know that shifting from Steven to Chris to Drone 14 and back paid off and made it a better story. And while I can't say I won't ever make another part to this-PT with Coach was mean to be a one off and so was Crossroad Club but they aren't staying that way so we'll see what happens.
Ben
4/9/24, 5:06 AM
Still one of my favorites!!
4/9/24, 4:32 AM
I loved it. Thank you again.
4/9/24, 4:15 AM
Really hot. I enjoyed it a lot

4/9/24, 4:30 AM
@[ArielZagreus](/user/show/10040716) thank you, I'm glad you did
4/9/24, 2:43 AM
I know they're AI but the pictures help with the epilogue.
4/7/24, 11:49 PM
So happy to see this chapter! And I am so thrilled in how this chapter preludes to the what is about to happen. Clearly Jamie isn't just wanted, he is needed. It adds so much more depth to his value and how things go from here. So now the big question is, how and when will he be turn?

4/8/24, 3:11 PM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) I don't know that "turn" is the right word for what will happen with Jamie. This Interlude makes it pretty clear that Master and his drone henchmen will actively try to bring Jamie in, though it also suggests their first choice method remains persuasion. So maybe "be turned" might be the better verb tense here. Then there's the League's intent to try and interfere with Master acquiring Jamie, to try and apprehend him or some of his drones. How will that play out?

4/9/24, 12:36 AM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) Yeah, I clearly didn't proof read what I wrote. I think this is either going one of two ways. One Jamie switches sides. He gets some more personal time with Dusk, keeps getting worked at the gym, and souring towards the Tribunal more and more. Though Dusk will have his work cut out for him, because Onyx is right to a point. The other is that Jamie is apprehended by the league and we get to see what the Tomb is. Either way, Luxor remains a mole and his conversion is much slower.
3/31/24, 5:16 AM
Your edit has been approved. Please chck the paragraphs at the end, they are "a bit" long.

3/31/24, 5:19 AM
@[Pup Vince](/user/show/10023016) Did they all combine on your end? They look separated to me on my view.

Zander
4/1/24, 7:10 PM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) I also wonder when there will be a continuation of the story about desires? Where the unfaithful man is controlled and his husband is invited to watch it in the office where the orgy is going on?

4/1/24, 8:06 PM
@[Zander](/user/show/10015044) It’s also in the works! After I finish this, I’m gonna focus on my commissioned story, but Sinfulfillment will be finished. I’m proud of what I have in store.

4/2/24, 8:09 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) It was an issue on my side only, sorry!

Anonymous
4/6/24, 10:00 PM
@[EdIam] The dumbing down of the twins, now triplets, is the most exciting thing ont this story to me. I like that they sound very stupid, not just slow minded, word-limited or with the simple "duhh," they sound utterly stupid talking the way they do now. The use of childish words is a good touch, I like they say "happy juice", "poopy", or "pee-pee", that language makes them sound like complete morons. I like where you're taking Fred, I like that after being changed he's very good looking, and yet the family despises him. Im curious about the ending

Anonymous
4/9/24, 12:27 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) What’s next!
CHT
4/9/24, 12:17 AM
This story is so hot ... love that he is aware of everything that is happening
Anonymous
4/8/24, 11:57 PM
I live to serve the Virus :smiling_imp:
4/8/24, 11:03 PM
Amazing Epilogue!

4/8/24, 11:27 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) I’m a fan of the prologue/ epilogue. I’ve been in a debate about this online. Some writers hate them, claim no one reads them. I think it’s a great way to say goodbye to characters. I’m glad you liked it!