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4/9/24, 5:21 AM
Some great plot twists in this epilogue! I especially liked how you brought back Tucker from the original FanTCDude story at the end--it felt like a post-credits scene from a Marvel movie. I do wish we'd gotten a bit more mental transformation stuff in the last couple of chapters to help set up these endings; it felt like the action suddenly ramped into overdrive, and we didn't get as many of those character psychology moments you do so well.

4/9/24, 11:36 AM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) > it felt like a post-credits scene from a Marvel movie. That was what I was going for. I should've labeled it better... As to the main body of your comment -- I agree. This is a result of "Pantsing" -- making it up as you go along. I realized suddenly that I was at the end of what I wanted to do with the "plot" and even though I could've squeezed out another couple of chapters, personally, I'm ready to move on. It's been 3 months with this story -- I really want to get to my next project. For the middle movie of the trilogy, it's not bad. I feel like I got good traction at the end. I've left most of these stories open-ended in case I want to jump in and do something with them (one-shots or something) -- we'll see. Not my best, far from my worst. At least I see a future for the franchise.

4/9/24, 12:58 PM
@[absman420](/user/show/162063) I'm the same way when it comes to writing longer stories. I start off doing the slow build with simmering tension, but at some point I just want to finish the damn story already, and so sometimes I'll speed things up towards the end. (My cardinal sin is fast-forwarding through sex scenes, since I don't find them very interesting to write).
Hinner
4/9/24, 4:45 AM
The AI images... They're a real turn off for me, they were especially at the beginning, had to read the first chapters on metabods even. But I get that some people like them and you probably do too, or you wouldnt put them in the first place. If you could make them optional by putting them behind a link or something like it next time would make the experience much better for me, and probably other people too. (I've seen other authors do it in this site). The story is flawless as usual though!

4/9/24, 11:28 AM
@[Hinner](/user/show/10013948) I inserted the pics because I thought it'd be fun. As you note, other authors do it and, like everybody probably, I've been playing with an AI generator. (I collect morphed images, as well.) Sorry you didn't feel it was successful.

4/9/24, 12:08 PM
@[absman420](/user/show/162063) You mentioned Metabods in your comment and I want to share a quick bit. On this site, including the epilogue, there have been 14K views and 136 comments (as of 4/9/24). On metabods, (where the epilogue will not be available until Saturday, 4/13) there have been over 20K views, but only 2 comments. Guess what makes me happier -- views or comments?
4/9/24, 3:41 AM
My dude, my man, this has been something else, hasn't it? I mean, having a character get "Tuckered" out, as it has been referred to, must be such a difficult thing. Keeping the reader's attention throughout the transformation, never letting up even as words grow poorer and poorer at explicating the sheer, staggering masculine size that must be so clear in your mind's eye. But you mange to do it. Over and over. Even in several spurts in this "b-ranch" of the story. Thank you for sharing your skill, especially in this story, but also generally. I feel blessed that I've gotten to follow your work over the years. I'll light one in your honor on 420 Absman. And again, thank you for sharing your skill with the world.

4/9/24, 11:22 AM
@[Tresser](/user/show/969723) "Tuckered Out" is funny -- I'm gonna steal that. Thank you for sharing my really weird fetish.
4/9/24, 4:54 AM
I loved this! Shifting perspectives over the course of a 3000 word story doesn't always work, but it totally paid off here and only added to the sense of suspense and anticipation. I can see all kinds of ways that you might continue this story--maybe from the perspective of a friend who doesn't understand why Chris and Steven are acting so differently and have suddenly joined ROTC. I hope you do!

4/9/24, 5:36 AM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) Thank you, it's good to know that shifting from Steven to Chris to Drone 14 and back paid off and made it a better story. And while I can't say I won't ever make another part to this-PT with Coach was mean to be a one off and so was Crossroad Club but they aren't staying that way so we'll see what happens.
Ben
4/9/24, 5:06 AM
Still one of my favorites!!
4/9/24, 4:32 AM
I loved it. Thank you again.
4/9/24, 4:15 AM
Really hot. I enjoyed it a lot

4/9/24, 4:30 AM
@[ArielZagreus](/user/show/10040716) thank you, I'm glad you did
4/9/24, 2:43 AM
I know they're AI but the pictures help with the epilogue.
4/7/24, 11:49 PM
So happy to see this chapter! And I am so thrilled in how this chapter preludes to the what is about to happen. Clearly Jamie isn't just wanted, he is needed. It adds so much more depth to his value and how things go from here. So now the big question is, how and when will he be turn?

4/8/24, 3:11 PM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) I don't know that "turn" is the right word for what will happen with Jamie. This Interlude makes it pretty clear that Master and his drone henchmen will actively try to bring Jamie in, though it also suggests their first choice method remains persuasion. So maybe "be turned" might be the better verb tense here. Then there's the League's intent to try and interfere with Master acquiring Jamie, to try and apprehend him or some of his drones. How will that play out?

4/9/24, 12:36 AM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) Yeah, I clearly didn't proof read what I wrote. I think this is either going one of two ways. One Jamie switches sides. He gets some more personal time with Dusk, keeps getting worked at the gym, and souring towards the Tribunal more and more. Though Dusk will have his work cut out for him, because Onyx is right to a point. The other is that Jamie is apprehended by the league and we get to see what the Tomb is. Either way, Luxor remains a mole and his conversion is much slower.
3/31/24, 5:16 AM
Your edit has been approved. Please chck the paragraphs at the end, they are "a bit" long.

3/31/24, 5:19 AM
@[Pup Vince](/user/show/10023016) Did they all combine on your end? They look separated to me on my view.

Zander
4/1/24, 7:10 PM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) I also wonder when there will be a continuation of the story about desires? Where the unfaithful man is controlled and his husband is invited to watch it in the office where the orgy is going on?

4/1/24, 8:06 PM
@[Zander](/user/show/10015044) It’s also in the works! After I finish this, I’m gonna focus on my commissioned story, but Sinfulfillment will be finished. I’m proud of what I have in store.

4/2/24, 8:09 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) It was an issue on my side only, sorry!

Anonymous
4/6/24, 10:00 PM
@[EdIam] The dumbing down of the twins, now triplets, is the most exciting thing ont this story to me. I like that they sound very stupid, not just slow minded, word-limited or with the simple "duhh," they sound utterly stupid talking the way they do now. The use of childish words is a good touch, I like they say "happy juice", "poopy", or "pee-pee", that language makes them sound like complete morons. I like where you're taking Fred, I like that after being changed he's very good looking, and yet the family despises him. Im curious about the ending

Anonymous
4/9/24, 12:27 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) What’s next!