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6/9/25, 9:34 AM
One of the hottest stories ive read in a long while. Wishing Mike a speedy recovery so that he too may join the next camping trip >:)
6/9/25, 8:03 AM
this is so fucking good
6/8/25, 1:48 AM
Silver foxes aren't really my thing and I wish we'd seen more of Daniel's transformations but the concept is really great and I hope we'll see a lot more!

6/8/25, 1:53 AM
@[Zi19](/user/show/922060) Thanks for the feedback! Question: I was a little concerned about the length of the story. It's 3000 words, and I was concerned that if I expanded the transformation part the word count might put people off. Sounds like I misjudged that? Also, regarding Daniel's, I was really split on that as I was writing it. On the one hand, I agree that there's almost nothing in there other than some very obvious implications he got changed. On the other hand, the narration follows Daniel primarily, and the idea is that the person being modified doesn't entirely understand what's going on; ergo, it was intentional that his changes weren't fully described. But, I can completely see where you're coming from and I'll re-assess that for the next installment.

6/8/25, 10:29 AM
@[astrolub](/user/show/471552) I can see where you're coming from, re: the narrative reason why we don't really get the details of Daniel's transformations. Otoh, McGill got several moments of confusion in regards to _his_ own transformation so maybe you could've worked it in for Daniel somehow before that final ray hit? As for the length, my personal limit is thinking "damn this chapter is long" is around 7k-8k words lol so yeah. I'm just one person though, anyone else reading this feel free to throw in your 2 cents!

6/9/25, 4:24 AM
@[Zi19](/user/show/922060) Thanks for the feedback. Major lesson that this confirmed: I must wait at least 1 day before editing again and submitting. You're right about some of that inconsistency, I agree. I suspect I would've caught it on a re-read the next day instead of an hour later. And thanks for the note on length. My last story (before this) was something like 12k words and I was pretty nervous about that length. I, personally, tend to avoid stories >6–8k words on here, so it sounds like we're similar in that. A story I'm pre-writing now tries to go for about 1250–1800 words/chapter (I'm on ch. 12 of that, but it's not posted yet because I'm working hard on the consistency because it has a huge amount of world-building).
Faun
6/8/25, 1:41 PM
Very nice work. The scenes flowed well, and I found myself taken along by all the changes happening - everyone pulled a bit closer into their fantasy. Thanks for sharing your work!

6/9/25, 3:00 AM
@Faun Thanks! I really appreciate that and I’m glad you enjoyed. I’m trying to branch out (just a little).
Anonymous
6/9/25, 1:34 AM
Love this, hope there is some spanking in Liam’s future especially if he can’t keep his hands of his little dick :grinning:

lukas pucci
6/9/25, 2:57 AM
@Anonymous u gotta stay tuned then lmao
Boomer
6/9/25, 1:41 AM
Fucking incredible stuff. Best slow-burn I've seen in forever...

lukas pucci
6/9/25, 2:57 AM
@[Boomer](/user/show/10007241) thank u dudeee haha
Muscle-Flex
6/8/25, 5:15 PM
Gone for a week and come back to two new installments! The writing here is really good - really got into the minds of the characters. The threesome was a clever idea and felt completely natural as it evolved. And the ending!!! Hahahaha! Liam's confusion and how he ended up in his situation was hilarious. Oh wait, damn, not another tent in my shorts. Gulp. On to Chapter Seven. There goes the rest of my weekend....

lukas pucci
6/9/25, 1:07 AM
@[Muscle-Flex](/user/show/2059714) liam’s got no idea how he keeps ending up like that either tbh. glad the threesome felt natural—it was hell to write without making it cringe lol enjoy ch 7, it only gets worse from here
6/8/25, 9:54 PM
Re read it twice now

lukas pucci
6/9/25, 1:05 AM
@[M.A.B](/user/show/10063003) dudeee thanks sm
6/8/25, 11:04 PM
I love you Edlam. This story is so exciting that i was cumming twice while reading it. Please more of these stories and thank you very much