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Anonymous
3/6/24, 6:55 AM
Was there any follow up to this? Would really love to see where the story was heading!
Anonymous
6/28/20, 4:25 AM
Is it still okay to call guys without a prominent booty "assless chaps"?

Anonymous
3/6/24, 6:32 AM
@Anonymous **:rofl: :rofl: :rofl:**
Anonymous
3/6/24, 5:52 AM
mmm… parasitic goo!!!
Anonymous
3/6/24, 5:50 AM
hot concept and writing!!!
3/6/24, 5:27 AM
My first ever story! Thanks to a very special dad out there that encouraged me to post this. I hope everyone enjoys it as much as I did making this :)
3/6/24, 4:08 AM
Are we getting a Coach Brown/JoJo spinoff? Haha
Controlme
3/6/24, 12:21 AM
First thing I'd like to say is terrific beginning. You started off strong introducing Grayson and establishing his motives. Then you brought us to his problem: he's hot, but not hot enough to get women at the big college campus. Next, we are told of the solution: ARI (along with some hot pics of guys). Then, we reach the critical decision point of the story: Grayson picks out his new super hot body and agrees to the terms and conditions without so much as a glance (like we all do). He comes out of his trance uber hot (again, nice pic), and then the story completely unravels as you finish it in a few paragraphs that could basically be summed up in the statement, "and then gay sex happened." You did a great job bringing us to what should have been an amazingly hot sex scene, but it was just a quick glossover. You need to amend the story, ending it right after they all get their messages from ARI telling them to go to a party. Then, write chapter 2, a detailed account of what happens at the party. Grayson's revelation that he is compelled to do what these businessmen tell him to do. Grayson sucking his first cock. Grayson losing his anal virginity. Grayson, Julian, and Kendall putting on a gay sex show for the businessmen while the businessmen recover from round one. Grayson discovering new things about his body--his lack of a gag reflex and ability to deep throat, his auto lubricating hole that can instantly adjust to any size cock, his super sensitive prostate that causes him to experience constant anal orgasms, his newly sensitized nipples that put him into a sexual frenzy when they are played with. There is so much to work with here as Grayson slowly uncovers what was all in that user agreement (like that he is now the property of an AI that is renting him out to raise revenue).

Anonymous Contributor
3/6/24, 3:18 AM
@Controlme Food for thought! Thanks
3/6/24, 2:29 AM
I really liked this. It carried a very personable, informal style that suited the purpose of the story well, and the himbo/jockificaiton of James was done well. I especially liked the idea that you tread the line between magic and reality, kind of keeping it up to the reader of whether or not there was something supernatural going on or it was simply James blending and fitting into his environment. Very well done!
3/6/24, 2:26 AM
Humm 🤤❤️
blankbot
3/6/24, 1:57 AM
Great writing.