“Master’s Mezmer’s Wonders… is the best carnival show ever.”

I really liked the first few chapters of this story with Steve, Mark and their whole dynamic but I feel like Mark is pretty weird here. Initially he was trying to help Steve get a job cause he was struggling to find anything and they end up planning to do this internship but first Steve needs to go through sub training. The description for the sub training seems intense to the both of them but Mark just says he'll be fine basically, he's strong. Cut to after the training and Steve is clearly not himself and Mark is unhappy with what he's had to go through. Now he's physically seen his husband, naked, collared and being objectified by a bunch of men and instead of taking Steve with him and saying they'll figure something else out, he just leaves him there? I get it kind of needs to happen that way for the story to continue with the internship but still. I might've read some stuff wrong but the tone of this story seems more dark kinky than hot kinky to me at least, don't know if that's intentional. I thought the training camp would've shown Steve the pleasures of being a sub but that he's still himself. Especially with the whole thing about having power in submission and the pleasure he was feeling. Then when he reunites with Mark, he's still as he was at the beginning but now Mark jokingly teases that he 'owns' Steve but isn't really serious about it at all. Then when they're back at home, Steve kind of tries to nudge Mark into being more dominant cause he likes pleasing him and making him feel good. Maybe he does more around the house or something and at the beginning of the story he's shown to be lovable but a bit lazy with helping around. It's just the contrast between their loving relationship and the harsh, objectification of subs is just a bit strange. It could work with Mark supporting Steve, I just feel like he's supporting him in the wrong way by letting him continue being a sub like this when even he doesn't like it? Still, I really enjoyed the story and a lot of aspects up to this point. I initially came for the pup play chapter, thought it was going to be a 7 day pup thing but there was a nice mix of different kinks for each day. It's funny with a lot of the training week being aggressive and rough and then suddenly it's all good boys and toys. Also, Absolutely loved what you did with having Kev as a lovable jock character and the whole brotherhood bit of everyone trying to stay strong together and enduring and supporting each other through submission. Probably won't read the rest but overall was still a good read!

I love that story, I really want to be Casey. Under the control of my alpha, even lose my beloved attributes if it is his wish.

Interesting idea, but I couldn't get through the writing. It's giving A.I. vibes. If not A.I., then bad writing. To hopefully illustrate that I'm not trying to be mean, but give constructive feedback, here are specific things that look A.I., and whether or not if it is A.I. or bad writing, could be touched up. Reusing same words/sentence structure: **Like always,** Marc wore an unbuttoned flowing shirt over a white tanktop and tight speedos. **Like always**, the blue-collar pool boy looked dirty-hot. **his Dad had been dating men barely older than Alan’s 18 years old. His 50-year-old father dating 20-somethings** certainly did not inspire Alan **Then, he would** make Marc obedient. **Then, he would** use Marc to seduce his father. Marc was absolutely his father’s type. **Then, he would** use Marc to dose his father with X-1207 and take control of the household.

Got me horny as. Love sub rubber.

This is so hot, holy shit

Awesome , loved it !

I remember reading this back in the day and I didnt know it got continued all these years later. Is there gonna be any future chapters?

Oh wow, Iove the premise of this story! I love that those five powerful men who opposed the villian are thoroughly humbled and humiliated. Also the fact that the powerful men while a little pretentious are heroes who have wonderful intentions but are thhroughly and brutally humiliated is so hot. Powerful men who are also highminded and idealstic folks undergoing humiliation and defeat appeals to me so much. The only thing is even though the concept of five powerful men jibes with me, I mainly liked Agares and Andros, though thats mainly because they were a hunk and young handsome guy, the others were not to my taste, though I loved seeing their humiliation. Any chance of seeing another story where a group of powerful and respected men are humiliated? Like royalty and nobles, or a band of heroes who are also occupying powerful positions like in this story? All good men like the council but who are debased by depraved men who have it in for them. Also to me it would be even hotter, if they realize whats happening to them but can't resist, physically compelled but keep their minds to witness their downfall. Publically humiliated in front of the people they serve too.

Hey Ya'll Im revisiting this story and adding more However the rewrite is gonna cause this chapter to become 2 because of how much I added in lol. Edit: I'm so sorry for leaving you guys in the lurch with this story! I've been away due to investing time into my art skills and getting a new job and the such. Prepare for Nico to come back better than ever!!