Recent Comments

1/30/24, 5:48 PM
Even hotter than the last part. Love seeing the fag get pushed deeper and deeper, can't wait for the next chapter.

1/31/24, 6:03 AM
@[headlikeahole](/user/show/943243) Glad you enjoyed HLAH.
hairyartist
1/30/24, 3:18 PM
Awesome story, thank you!

1/31/24, 6:03 AM
@[hairyartist](/user/show/10013526) Thanks man.
1/29/24, 10:36 PM
🤤 Just wonderful.

1/31/24, 6:01 AM
@[GiveInToTheMusk](/user/show/909380) Thanks GITTM! Glad you enjoyed it.
1/31/24, 4:45 AM
I feel like I know these daddies IRL. For a short smut story, there is so much personality here that endears me. That and good lord is it hot.
1/31/24, 4:37 AM
Hotter and hotter.
1/31/24, 4:37 AM
This series is so hot. 🤤
1/31/24, 3:58 AM
Third time reading this and it’s just as hot as the first time. Can’t wait for future chapters
1/31/24, 3:05 AM
Sensitive, Poignant and on point. Exceptional!!
1/31/24, 2:36 AM
The fact that the next chapter hasn’t come out yet is distressing to say the least
1/30/24, 11:33 PM
This chapter was a highlight of the series. Having Dan and Taylor be converted like that was incredible. How they each had different kinks that ultimately meshed together was also well done. The whole scene of these big muscular subs begging to be owned by a smaller top will never stop driving me wild. Also the melding the three jocks went through was well laid out. How they could become more of a single mind. Influencing each other. Building off each other was beautiful. What they felt. What they thought. What they wanted. Very compelling. Though I must admit to being a bit bummed with the epilogue. Our nerd essentially has three jock slaves that are constantly 'brainwashed' by their own desires to submit to their Sir. It feels like a lost opportunity to explore what they did moving forward from there. Having the 'Jockboy' do any manner of things at the order or request of their shared Sir. Such as them going back to that gym and showing off? Or that Sir orders them to only go to that gym with certain dress requirements. Or just generally taking more dominance and control over their lives in general? It was just more of a happy ending. Not to say that was bad, just felt...quick.

1/30/24, 11:41 PM
@[Marik29](/user/show/10021139) Thanks for the kind comments! I actually struggled on including the epilogue or not. I wanted to give a glimpse of the future but I also felt like it closed off future possibilities if I wanted to write them. What I ultimately decided is that I don’t currently have any plans to expand this story, so I included it. BUT, if I do want to explore these characters more, I can edit the story and insert more chapters before the epilogue. So, no promises, but if get inspired, I might write about the morning after, or the first time Simon develops the dual broadcaster/receiver. Or go past the epilogue and write what happens when the first commercial Neurobridge is released.

1/31/24, 2:27 AM
@[Naedre](/user/show/931338) Oh, I fully get why you did the epilogue. It definitely shows a window into the aftermath. The story could have excluded it and still would have worked. That ending was just the right amount where the readers would have gone 'where is the rest of it?' or 'it can't stop there!' because it has the sudden cut off with the story being concluded. It can make your audience go crazy because they want more. And I must admit I am partly guilty of that with this ending. I am much more into the master/slave troupe with obvious controls and dominance like collars, chastity, and rubber. And having such elements in the story with these characters would have been beyond incredible in my eyes. So I was trying to impose my own interests into the story. And that isn't how this story was set up. This is much more of the resounding happy ending. With the characters finding a balance with each other. Everything was mutual and agreed upon.