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1/27/24, 2:42 PM
> Little Budd was so enthusiastic about the idea that he showed up at the Coach’s room before Big Budd had even hung up the phone. He, too, had put on some of the Littleman’s Gear, the spandex hot-shorts, and he wore them with the giddiness of a prancing pony. He also wore his CAT-diesel trucker’s cap.> I'm drawing some major comparisons between Little Budd and Pokey Dakota. I guess every main character needs a little slut as a side kick.
1/27/24, 2:39 PM
Hey man, big fan of your work! This story is amazing just like all your other stories and I can't wait for your next work! There was this one grammatical error tho. Through most of the story it would say "his" or "he" when it should have said "my" or "I" in certain parts.
1/27/24, 1:49 PM
Really hot. Why do I feel like using the X-1207 was the dad's suggestion in the first place lol, they've already been drugged before this story started
1/27/24, 12:42 PM
5/5 Glad to see my favorite story back. Can't wait for Chapter 6.
1/27/24, 11:51 AM
Please continue!!
1/27/24, 11:16 AM
Love reading ur stories edging myself picturing ur toy
1/27/24, 10:50 AM
Please continue!
1/27/24, 10:26 AM
Another hot chapter. I hope Bradley and Stellato end up together.
1/27/24, 9:11 AM
Love the series and thanks for the newest chapter! Hope to see more soon and where you take it
1/27/24, 7:48 AM
I enjoyed the story, but... Based on my own attempts at writing these stories, early attempts tend to be a bit bare bones. Some additional description might flesh out the scenes, the characters and their developing relationships. My favorite part of transformation stories is the transformation itself, often embedded within a larger seduction and relationship development. You did some of this, but not enough to get my imagination fired up. Your entire transformation happened in the space of a couple of paragraphs. It alluded to hypnosis and brainwashing, but I thought the description of the process was slim. On top of that the character gained all this muscle growth simply by watching videos. Was there magic involved? I don't pretend to be a good writer, so please don't take me too seriously. Your story writing is better than mine, and real authors will no doubt give you better advice than I can. My best ignorant advice is to keep enjoying the writing and the creative process itself. It fires the imagination. My second best advice is probably to get advice from someone who knows more about writing and the creative process. And again, I did enjoy the story!! I don't read the whole story if I don't like it, or leave comments (stupid or otherwise). Best wishes! And have fun!