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1/16/24, 12:14 AM
Just my kind of story. Really nice.
1/15/24, 11:45 PM
Can't wait for the next part. I'm picturing Edward with his dick in Harry's ass and then reaches around and slides the sleeve on Harry's dick. As Edward is fucking and jacking off Harry with the sleeve, Harry is getting DP'd with his own cock.
1/15/24, 11:40 PM
Very eager to see where this goes long term!
1/15/24, 10:29 PM
Very hot, plus you have finally convinced me to read this series!
1/15/24, 10:07 PM
Awesome story. That captured my first submission to a freshman roomate perfectly. Jake is a wide open character...very approachable.
1/15/24, 9:24 PM
Absolutely great start! I really admire your ability to really get into the progression of a story. We've been introduced to the Neurobridge and received some trickles of how it works, really properly met our two main characters (who have really distinctive and unique voices, bravo), and been introduced to a few other characters who could become important later. The little hints of Jake's fantasies about how the Neurobridge could work were really great for keeping up the pace, and also worked really well for narrating his headspace during the actual D/s encounter. I'm excited to see more of this setting! I could keep talking about it for ages lol, but I'm sure you have a plan and I can't wait to see where you intend to go with it.

1/15/24, 10:06 PM
Thank you. Very high praise. I have written the 3 chapters I have planned for this, so I think I have added enough foreshadowing. Now, if I decide to go beyond 3 chapters, who knows? Also, I just want to say I love "[The Transformation of Albion.](https://www.gayspiralstories.com/story/show/476709)" A favorite of mine. Anyone who enjoys supernatural transformation should go check it out. Glad you are posting here again @[Fred W. Kong](/user/show/476663)
1/15/24, 5:34 PM
Man, this is a great piece of writing!!! I'm in awe of what you've put down. You've captured something I've been striving to get on the page: the beauty and emotional bond in the master-servant relationship. Just reading through Simon and Jacob taking their roles as Dom and sub and the relationship and the bond and trust displayed left me speechless. I'm really looking forward to seeing where you go with this and I'll definitely be taking notes along the way.

1/15/24, 9:56 PM
@[New Guy in Town](/user/show/820450) Thank you. I'm trying to express what a healthy D/s relationship would look like. Glad to hear it is connecting with you. Next chapter is more of their bond before we get into more of the Mind Control stuff.
1/15/24, 2:52 PM
Super hot start, can't wait for the rest. Jake most relatable character in all of fiction?

1/15/24, 9:54 PM
@[Cervello](/user/show/354726) Parts of both Jake and Simon may or may not be based on some of my own journey :wink: Very glad you found Jake relatable.
1/15/24, 9:50 PM
Damn that was hot. This has been best reads I had here for a while. Looking forward to the next part and any of your future stories
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1/15/24, 9:17 PM
This has by far been one of the best reads I’ve read in years! The intense natural submission! The true domination that helps guide Jake to further his submission. Such a hot and sexy read!!