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1/7/24, 8:08 AM
That was fantastic! A perfect package of horny gym bros, a hot twink and some mind-altering hoodoo with a great twist at the end. I love your stories and this was another great addition!

1/7/24, 11:27 PM
@[Ruffcub](/user/show/21211) Glad you enjoyed it!
1/7/24, 10:10 PM
This is a very hot story and concept—I was reading it just to approve it at first, but it got hotter and hotter as time went on! I also appreciate your exploration of serious themes like toxic masculinity especially in the father relationship, and I approve of your coach's empathy for his students. Good shit! Oh, one other thing, I would suggest separating dialogue into more paragraphs—it's standard practice to have a new paragraph every time a new person is speaking. I found it hard to tell who was speaking in any given string of dialogue because it was all in one paragraph and there were few markers to tell me what words were being said by which person. The dialogue was definitely hot, though, and smooth!

1/7/24, 10:59 PM
@[Soren Fitz](/user/show/10011670) HI! Thank you so much for the comment. I see why all the fanfic writers were always so excited about getting them :sweat_smile: Like in the begining I didn't plan to have the step-dad play such a big role, but (SPOILER i guess) my fave trope is like revenge/role-reversal/small(er)-on-top kinda dynamic, and I wanted coach to stay the alpha, so someone had to take that place. As for the coach, I do myself prefer the caring type of domination to humiliation, so I wanted him to be such a figure. We'll have both of course - but the coach fantasy started all of this, so he'll probably be the carrier of my personal fantasies. Also thanks for the tip! I did think of that at some point, but was afraid of making the paragraphs too short, but i did go through the whole thing like 4 times, so i didn't even notice it wasn't clear - I added them after reading your comment, so it should be better now.
1/7/24, 9:47 PM
I liked the ending, tbh. Part of it is because I think it’s hot when the bad guy wins in situations like this. But also, it was a completely forced mental overhaul from the start - the ending just confirmed that more plainly than the rest of the story. Saying it only turned dark now would mean ignoring everything that led up to it. I enjoyed the finale!
1/7/24, 9:24 PM
Hope more is to come
1/7/24, 7:56 PM
This story is really good and has been hitting all the right buttons so far! I gotta know, what episode of Dr. Who is being referenced here?

1/7/24, 8:48 PM
@[Saccnt2](/user/show/2949320) The episodes from Season 3 when Martha has to cover for the Doctor when he uses the Chameleon Arch to put his Time Lordiness into that pocket watch to hide from the Family of Blood. It's been a minute since I watched the episode, but I think the son? can control the scarecrows and uses them to kill a couple of the people the Family ends up possessing. And thanks! I'm having a bit of trouble figuring out where I want to go with the transformation in the next part, but hopefully writing some other stuff in the interim + getting back into normal routines will help.
Anonymous
1/7/24, 8:24 PM
Loving it! More, please!!
Anonymous
1/7/24, 5:44 PM
Excellent
Anonymous
1/7/24, 5:00 PM
The meeting and interactions with Frank and Joey were so HOT! So is their pic!
Josh
1/7/24, 4:43 PM
Yeah, not a great ending. Alex deserved to get what was coming to him.
1/7/24, 2:38 PM
I feel like Josh deserves some wedgies for what he did to Karl, don’t you think? 🤭