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Dec 22, 2023
12/23/23, 2:54 AM
I DEFINITELY need another chapter. See how Ralph reacts to his loss
Dec 21, 2023
12/22/23, 9:47 PM
Wow what a story, just finished the full novel and it was a thoroughly enjoyable read. As a sucker for a happy romantic ending, especially involving polyamorous groups, I won't say I wasn't a little disappointed by Eddie's fate. The finall confrontation also felt a little anticlimactic, like it was over before it really began and there was never actually a moment were Eddie might have succeeded. But there were also so many things about the story that really had me hooked. Cycling teams are a very under appreciated niche in the world of sports themed fetish erotica, despite being so well suited to them. The team work, the uniforms, the built in hierarchy of the different members, all innately submissive to the leader, lend themselves perfectly to the drone story genre and I'm thrilled you decided to go this direction. The many subversions and misdirects throughout were thrilling and really kept up the suspense. I kept second guessing who the villain was actually going to be until almost the very end. Was it Devin or was it Ryder? All the different hints at Ryders means of control, never giving anyway too much away until the reveal but just enough to keep the mystery going. The seeming conflict between Ryder's group and the implanted, between the natural athletes and the artifically enhanced appeared at first to be the central theme of the narrative only for that too to be turned on its head. What an absolutely fantastic novel. Really hope you chose to write more in this genre and style.

12/22/23, 10:39 PM
@[phillipsm](/user/show/919402) First things first -- thank you very much! I'm glad you spent the time with it and enjoyed it. I worked really hard to keep the creepiness and paranoia building, with Eddie realizing he was walking into the trap, but not quite getting the weight of those decisions -- writing it all of as roleplay. I'm glad you felt it paid off. > The final confrontation also felt a little anticlimactic, like it was over before it really began and there was never actually a moment were Eddie might have succeeded. I understand this comment. I tossed out a red herring there, I admit, but I wanted the reader to root for Eddie so I could take that away from them. Also to give me some forward motion toward the end of the book. A couple of the critiques I've gotten wished I'd made more of the personality changes after being Implanted -- like the Stepford Wives homage with Kelley. I get that. I thought Eddie's happy capitulation -- that he knew what had been done to him, but he didn't care as long as he remained the Favorite -- was enough, but I realize i could've gone further. Again, thank you for your kind words and for slogging through it. If you would be so kind as to leave me a review on Amazon, I'd appreciate it! edited to add: I agree with you about the bike eroticism, but I was really looking at the group masturbation scenes as the focus

12/23/23, 2:04 AM
@[absman420](/user/show/162063) No, thank you very much for penning such a thrilling novel. The build up definitely paid off. Your never sure what which trap Eddie is walking into until its too late. I suspected it was a deliberate decision to through in a little extra twist right at the end. Very George R.R. Martin of you. I think the personality changes were handled very well. The amplification of Devin's negative traits and libido and the stepfordization of Kelley seemed fairly clear. Especially contrasted against Ryder's group and their hostility towards the Implant. Thats what lead me to think the conflict in the story was going to be Eddie resisting the temptation of the Implant and succumbing to Ryder's programming. Honestly are the first few riding scenes I was thinking that Ryder was using audio hyponsis and the walkie talkies to program thw guys. Then again if all the guys on the team were Implanted as well, maybe their hostility towards the others doesn't actually make sense. Perhaps you could have gone a little further with it because Eddie copulating didn't really come across that clearly to me. Will absolutely do that. Hopefully the good reviews will encourage you to write more long form novels like this in the future. Oh I totally agree that the group masturbation scenes were the focus of the overtly erotic scenes, I was talking more of the subtle eroticism of the bike time. Plus I didn't want to give away the big pay off scenes in case someone read the comments before they finished the whole novel.
Mind bender
12/19/23, 3:24 AM
I am Beyond curious about what was done in the end with the lamp!!! I hope that gets explained soon.

12/19/23, 3:25 AM
@Mind bender Naw unfortunately that won’t be brought up until the final chapter.

Mind Bender
12/23/23, 1:24 AM
@[NewsScene](/user/show/270454) Damnnn, I figured that would be the case! Looking forward to reading more.
mikegay4u
12/23/23, 12:03 AM
How do I get in touch with these SQUIP volks? Great story.
12/22/23, 11:40 PM
Thank youuuuuu so much. I love this series and am so happy it has a sweet ending. 🥰🥰🥰
mic
12/22/23, 11:38 PM
so fuckng hot, please more doc students should learn prostate exams, so cool hot written, please more
Dec 22, 2023
12/22/23, 10:17 PM
Oh wow. This is great. Horrifying sexy great chapter. Hope theres more chapter after this. I wanna see the outcome of Krampus' visit. I hope Parker doesnt get a big head and be like his brother. I want the father to get his revenge too. And did i see a potential with Jake and Parker, yes please.
12/22/23, 10:01 PM
Thanks for the awesome story! It is always a pleasure to read them!
12/22/23, 9:52 PM
I love the conflict of wanting to support his friend, yet being aroused by his friend's humiliation. I also love the description as the officer strokes his hapless victim's cock, inducing him to cum despite his efforts to restrain himself.
12/22/23, 8:05 PM
I like this more obedient version of him, no resistance at all