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offeringservice26
12/16/23, 5:25 AM
HOT story!!!! So many of my fantasies all rolled up into one! Not sure if this is your first story entirely or just your first one on this site, but you’re off to an amazing start!
bigjoe
12/16/23, 5:09 AM
hot story man! made me cum!!
bigjoe
12/16/23, 5:08 AM
Nice story! Cute pfp! Is that you?
12/5/23, 9:12 PM
I have to agree with Hypnothrill. It's a great setup and very promising plot to be something very exciting, but the storytelling was just way too rushed. At times it was almost a ramble of things all blurred into a convoluted paragraph, and many of the characters were not properly introduced so it got a bit confusing later on as to who is doing what with who (also I think some names were not consistent, for example, Alex's father was James/Jason). Slow down the pacing of the story, give everyone a proper entrance into the story, and give it some space to elaborate a bit on the flow of events, descriptions of different scenes and setups, the takeover of the guys, their commands, and the actions. I know it's easy to get carried away and get excited at wanting to throw everything into it, but once you're done, give it a full re-read to make sure the flow is evenly paced, well balanced, no typos, mistakes, or rambling sentences or paragraphs. It's a good start nonetheless! :wink:

MakoTaco
12/16/23, 2:05 AM
@[tomozco](/user/show/13902) Best feedback I’ve seen on this site tbh!
Anonymous
12/11/23, 10:02 PM
I would prefer the dad to be dragged into the world of reluctant submission. He needs to have a blackmail taste of cock

MakoTaco
12/16/23, 1:46 AM
@Anonymous Yea, it would feel kind of out of character if hank began liking it and doing it willingly.
spiralthiago
12/16/23, 1:12 AM
Exelent! more poopers please
Dec 14, 2023
12/15/23, 10:13 PM
That's a hot one! Nice and concise. Even though the action is in a bit of a fantasy dreamland, the description gave it the level of firmness in their physical experience that suggested more like they had been transported rather than just a dream. Of course, I always enjoy the foot content you provide, plus the father-son action. Good work! Maybe you might want to work on the other men invited too...?

12/15/23, 11:28 PM
@[tomozco](/user/show/13902) Thank u for the nice words tomozco, glad you enjoyed it.
Anonymous
12/15/23, 10:26 PM
Please continue this
12/15/23, 10:22 PM
Hot and creative idea. Sad it was never finished.
Anonymous
12/15/23, 9:12 PM
Kinda missing superman himself to get involved in the action. I hope we get to see more of his descent later on.