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bigjoe
12/16/23, 5:08 AM
Nice story! Cute pfp! Is that you?
12/5/23, 9:12 PM
I have to agree with Hypnothrill. It's a great setup and very promising plot to be something very exciting, but the storytelling was just way too rushed. At times it was almost a ramble of things all blurred into a convoluted paragraph, and many of the characters were not properly introduced so it got a bit confusing later on as to who is doing what with who (also I think some names were not consistent, for example, Alex's father was James/Jason). Slow down the pacing of the story, give everyone a proper entrance into the story, and give it some space to elaborate a bit on the flow of events, descriptions of different scenes and setups, the takeover of the guys, their commands, and the actions. I know it's easy to get carried away and get excited at wanting to throw everything into it, but once you're done, give it a full re-read to make sure the flow is evenly paced, well balanced, no typos, mistakes, or rambling sentences or paragraphs. It's a good start nonetheless! :wink:

MakoTaco
12/16/23, 2:05 AM
@[tomozco](/user/show/13902) Best feedback I’ve seen on this site tbh!
Anonymous
12/11/23, 10:02 PM
I would prefer the dad to be dragged into the world of reluctant submission. He needs to have a blackmail taste of cock

MakoTaco
12/16/23, 1:46 AM
@Anonymous Yea, it would feel kind of out of character if hank began liking it and doing it willingly.
spiralthiago
12/16/23, 1:12 AM
Exelent! more poopers please
Dec 14, 2023
12/15/23, 10:13 PM
That's a hot one! Nice and concise. Even though the action is in a bit of a fantasy dreamland, the description gave it the level of firmness in their physical experience that suggested more like they had been transported rather than just a dream. Of course, I always enjoy the foot content you provide, plus the father-son action. Good work! Maybe you might want to work on the other men invited too...?

12/15/23, 11:28 PM
@[tomozco](/user/show/13902) Thank u for the nice words tomozco, glad you enjoyed it.
Anonymous
12/15/23, 10:26 PM
Please continue this
12/15/23, 10:22 PM
Hot and creative idea. Sad it was never finished.
Anonymous
12/15/23, 9:12 PM
Kinda missing superman himself to get involved in the action. I hope we get to see more of his descent later on.
Anonymous
12/15/23, 7:13 PM
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Dec 14, 2023
Rubberdrone
12/15/23, 4:28 PM
This is an amazing story..so hot! Can't wait for them to return to jack... also hoping Jack becomes more and more a son to Peter!

12/15/23, 5:21 PM
@[Rubberdrone](/user/show/10001726) Glad you liked it!