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Arpágonu
12/3/23, 2:57 PM
The story is following an interesting path, a descent of sorts to the dark side. Maybe a makeover would be interesting, more in the style of a bad boy, in contrast to the normal Johnny. Maybe a tattoo or piercing, although possibly the best thing is to smoke, after all, Johnny is a pillar of good health and lifestyle habits, and perhaps introducing such a bad habit will be a catharsis for the new master of that body. I look forward to the third part

12/14/23, 1:14 AM
@[Arpágonu](/user/show/2723721) Thanks for the comment. I was originally planning on having that be a later change, but decided to move it up in the story because of your comment and like how it turned out.
12/14/23, 12:52 AM
This is a highly erotic story of racial conquest. The narrative arc moves the central character from conqueror to slave-warrior through anal insemination. It is an arousing account of transformation through sexual domination.
Arpágonu
12/13/23, 10:07 PM
That fall to the dark and wild side is super sexy. You have left me wanting to see what he does with the car. He certainly seems like a bad boy now. I imagine a camaro style car would suit him, maybe a motorcycle too. I love your way of writing and that you continue to do it consistently. I can't wait for the next part
12/13/23, 9:21 PM
I've gotta xay, this is a really well written story!
12/13/23, 12:54 PM
This story doesn't seem to be going anywhere. what was J's issue with D? why didn't the store owner ask them why they were fighting? kind of a strange thing to gloss over.

12/13/23, 8:01 PM
@[musclejunky](/user/show/10019676) Hi musclejunky, thanks for the feedback. I know I have to adjust my shot. I was already thinking of explaining some things in chapter 4. I tried to write to you privately to ask for advice, but I can't find you on the forum.
12/13/23, 7:21 PM
Great story! Hope you continue with it. It has a lot of promise
12/13/23, 6:31 PM
Loving the humiliation. Very hot story!
12/13/23, 3:57 PM
Woooooow my ñame is Alejandro, and I’d really enjoy to have the same fate as him… hottest story ever!