Recent Comments

12/8/23, 2:16 AM
Fucking love this serie. This new chapter is even hotter and kinkier, can't wait for another one with more fur, fetishes and overmasculine transformations (also more incest that is always a good one) . About the images, please do not remove them cause they really capture fully the furry hotness of it all, i didn't mind at all the links from a different site, yeah maybe not that safe but it's easier to appreciate the ai art there, especially if you are a phone user 'cause gayspirals isn't very friendly when it comes open and try to zoom images (especially if your phone is cheap lol) More please

12/8/23, 7:56 AM
@[DDS.DD](/user/show/10018919) About a quarter way through chapter 3. It might turn into a longer chapter....or I can split it into 2 smaller chapters. Any preference? I'll see how long it gets. Well funny you should mention incest.... ;)

12/8/23, 10:28 AM
@[Ciriii](/user/show/10002839) I think either one could work, it depends how you want to do your story
12/6/23, 9:25 PM
I think this chapter deserves the incest tag

12/7/23, 8:58 PM
@[darkblade2814](/user/show/243317) Sorry if I stepped out of line, I can delete this one if you want to

Martin
12/7/23, 9:19 PM
@[darkblade2814](/user/show/243317) You can add a tag yourself if you think it's appropriate. Tags can be edited by any user unless the author has explicitly blocked changing the tags. And it's not an offense to point out a missing tag.

12/8/23, 7:50 AM
@[darkblade2814](/user/show/243317) Hey no you didn't! I took your advice and added the incest tag :) thanks And if that's something you enjoy....chapter 3 is for you haha its on its way

12/8/23, 10:27 AM
@[Ciriii](/user/show/10002839) nice and thank you
Anonymous
12/8/23, 7:18 AM
Reading back on some of these earlier chapters, I find Sarah's reaction to Nick here *veeeeery* interesting, considering everything we learn later on. Could there have been another "mastermind" under our noses this whole time?

12/8/23, 9:03 AM
@Anonymous And now you're time-travelling all the way back here! I'm just cleaning up the next chapter now and I promise it has _none_ of the answers you're looking for!
12/8/23, 4:37 AM
Whoa the text ai for story writing is pretty good.

12/8/23, 7:59 AM
@[Leoscurse](/user/show/1219438) Haha I haven't tried it. To be honest writing these things gives me a boner so I'd rather do it myself haha
12/8/23, 7:02 AM
Incredible!!!
Anonymous
12/7/23, 11:13 AM
I'm honestly not sure what to make of Tommy's homophobia. It *feels* like it's supposed to be the central focus of the plot, but then it's basically 90% resolved in the first chapter. If the tone were more comedic, then I'd understand needing to sideline the main conflict so the raunchy "team bonding exercises" and whatnot could get underway, but as things are I'm just kind of scratching my head here.

12/7/23, 4:05 PM
@Anonymous Thank you for your comment. I appreciate all feedback. Positive feedback is good for my ego, but I also feel like constructive feedback or questions help make me a better writer. What if I told you that Tommy's homophobia is just the initial conflict while the audience learns about the world. And as Tommy (and the audience) gain more clarity on how the Marines operate, different conflicts arise. I intend Tommy to be the audience avatar and eventual hero of the story. But that means he needs to develop from a shitty homophobe to someone the audience actually likes pretty quickly. That is the goal, anyway. I appreciate feedback on how well I'm actually pulling it off.

Anonymous
12/8/23, 6:29 AM
@[Naedre](/user/show/931338) Well I was definitely getting "main conflict" vibes from it, so if that's not the case, then I'd expect similar themes to build on it later on. So for instance, one of the other things that stuck out to me here was the repeated use of the term "human" -- I could see that expanding into some kind of fantastical racism(speciesism?), which would play off Tommy's initial homophobia in an interesting way. But if, on the other hand, the later conflicts have little to do with identity politics, then it does feel kind of unnecessarily emphasized. Before I give the wrong impression, I should probably add that I do like what you've written so far! I wouldn't bother with any of these comments if I didn't. It's interesting that you envision Tommy as an audience avatar. It feels like anyone with even a shade of intolerance would usually be immediately relegated to the "unsympathetic victim" role on this site. I'm curious to see how you develop him going forward.
12/8/23, 3:37 AM
Hit buttons for sure. I can see others who don't have those buttons feeling a bit baffled but... well they're the ones missing out.

12/8/23, 5:47 AM
@[edhypnofan](/user/show/10002490) Hey, if people don't read the tags that's on them. 😄
12/8/23, 2:57 AM
Isn't this one fun? There's so much to unpack here. In Jamie's dream, we get to see inside Dusk's head and into his past. We have his confrontation with his former mentor, and Dusk helping to make sure that "fucker got what he deserved," as Dusk so eloquently put it in Chapter 2. Then there's Minotaur's admissions regarding the incident that sent Midnight over the edge, followed by Midnight's bargain with Master, and the beginning of his true submission and slavery to Master. The next part puts us squarely back in Jamie's unhappy present, where he's trying to make sense of what he just dreamt. There's another confrontation between Jamie and Kane about the escapade of a new Villain or Vigilante. And the irony is that neither knows that the new supe on the block was in fact Jamie, and the event described in Cape News is Jamie's likely future starting to take shape. The League may have an idea, though, because in comes Mentat to interrogate Jamie, with more than a hint of creepiness. The final elevator scene wraps it up so neatly. First Mentat confesses that he (and by extension the Tribunal) now sees Jamie as lost, and fit only to bait a trap for Master. Like that'll work. It does sort of lead one to think that maybe the League **hasn't** cottoned on to who the new "villain" really is, because if they had, would they actually risk letting Master get to keep him? The closer is Mentat blackmailing Claymore, seemingly just because he can. You gotta wonder what's up with that. But it does establish that yet another one of the League's leading "heroes" is as evil as any supervillain. Of the four we've seen so far, the best one is the self-centered, glory chasing jackal, Valour. We haven't yet met Dauntless in person, but given that he is the founder of this fundamentally corrupt organization, and the utter nastiness of his cohorts on the Tribunal, it's impossible to think he'll be any better when we finally do. I can hardly wait to see what comes next. Thank you Neon Demon!
12/8/23, 2:48 AM
Very hot inflation and balloon transformation has been recently very alluring and this definitely hit those buttons perfectly
Anonymous
12/8/23, 12:11 AM
I really liked this one! I would have loved to see more of his partners reaction to what was going on. Also would be good to see more of the hypnotists escapades. Great story 😁