Recent Comments

11/26/23, 1:45 AM
YES! Robert finally got his comeuppance! I was scared when it seemed like Chris was lost, but the twist of Zeke saving the day with lies was brilliant. Glad to see that Robert can’t hurt anyone any longer, and that Chris and Alex get a happy (if himbo) ending. Amazing story! :)

11/27/23, 4:01 AM
@[Feed Your Head](/user/show/1170832) I'm glad you liked it! This was my first series and I might come back to it if people want. I wasn't sure if I could write something like this too well so I'm encouraged that you thought it was that good!

11/27/23, 4:32 PM
@[Riko](/user/show/24776) Really enjoyed this series!
11/27/23, 4:27 PM
Great story. I see what you mean by developing the character of the person whose mind is being controlled. Very seductively done.
StormRaven1217
11/27/23, 4:16 PM
I like where this one's going. I was hoping in this chapter we would learn more about how the main character became a zombie though.
Anonymous
11/25/23, 12:00 AM
Really love this series and your writing. Sanjay is a great protagonist and I like how he acts between being put under the spell and out of it. Looking forward to seeing where this story goes what with Quintin now involved and hopefully Djinn will be back soon. I do have one quick question though. I was just re-reading some of the older chapters and in Chapter XIV I notice that when Sanjay is guided by Djinn outside and Sanjay looks at his palace while in the spell you wrote: "In razor sharp stylized lettering that lights up in the middle of the lamp’s cheek, reads:" Is there perhaps a sentence missing here? I'm guessing there is supposed to be something here in the story (such as the name of his company or something because your next sentence is): "The lettering shimmers on the electric display before BURSTING forward into sparks and fog before dissipating."

11/25/23, 12:03 AM
@Anonymous Ehhh lousy phrasing on my part. I was trying to portray the company’s logo as some fancy electronic display that uses, like, holographic effects or some shit. Kiiiiiind of dropped a ball or two when I was describing that part. I might have to go back and see if I can do it better >.>

Anonymous
11/27/23, 4:26 AM
@[NewsScene](/user/show/270454) Oh don't worry. You definitely succeeded on that part with regards to making it sound very fancy with the electronic display and effects. That's definitely how I interpreted it. I just thought with that first line about the letters that maybe there was supposed to be a line there talking about the companies name or something. So really all I think you need to do is to just remove that “In razor sharp stylized lettering that lights up in the middle of the lamp’s cheek, reads:” line as that, combined with the colon gives the impression that there should be a line there about the lettering in particular.

11/27/23, 3:18 PM
@Anonymous Like, I wanted to portray the lettering to have the same kind of ‘font’ as the Kingdom Hearts logo, and I guess my powers of articulation has become limited 0-0
hairyartist
11/27/23, 1:45 PM
awesome story

11/27/23, 2:10 PM
@[hairyartist](/user/show/10013526) Thanks :smiley:
11/27/23, 2:10 PM
Great climax for Jayson and his Harem. I cant wait to read more, especially the other men from this story-verse.
11/25/23, 7:21 PM
Is it wrong that I'm hoping for Tri-Hard will win. The whole rubber army is such a turn on for me

Anonymous
11/25/23, 11:29 PM
@[Redcoma100](/user/show/41857) I don't think "Tri-Hard loses" and "the rubber supersoldier army remains operational" are mutually-exclusive outcomes. I mean, depending on how extensively the brain draining toilets are used, a LOT of these guys are going to be impractical to reintegrate into civilian society, even after Tri-Hard is defeated. And besides, who would *want* to go back to an ordinary life after experiencing the blissful submission and certainty of purpose the soldiers have? At this point I think it's less a question of *whether* there'll be an army of superdrones, and more a question of *who* will be in control of it.

11/25/23, 11:36 PM
@[Redcoma100](/user/show/41857) **Tri-Hard** is definitely on the up. Maybe he will win in the end,... Either way, he'll be bringing more drones soon!

11/25/23, 11:44 PM
@Anonymous Those are some very interesting thoughts and I'm so sorry that I cannot comment on them further. Thank you! Now, get back in your box!:speak_no_evil:

Anonymous
11/27/23, 9:20 AM
@[Blazargus](/user/show/10012784) Never! *You* unleashed this kinky beast by creating such an engaging scenario -- now you have to deal with it! And I'm still waiting for Henry to get some proper clothing! He can't just run around without slick, form-fitting rubber coating every inch of his body! It's indecent! Nick has some serious balls to just leave his slave exposed like that. I'm surprised no one's called the cops on them yet!

11/27/23, 10:16 AM
@Anonymous The cops are busy getting the foam off of the remaining members of the squad that ran foul of Travis and **FreeDog** :p
11/27/23, 5:38 AM
Great story and perfect ending !
Ben
11/27/23, 3:58 AM
This is amazingly well written and hot 🔥
11/26/23, 11:51 PM
Great ending. Chris and Alex are happy and Robert's plan backfired. Another fun series.