Recent Comments

11/17/23, 10:11 PM
Too short! But a fun little nugget for sure. 🙂
Martin
11/17/23, 9:55 PM
What a unique and hot concept! I'm not too fond of superhero stories, but this one hits my buttons just right!
Nov 17, 2023
11/17/23, 9:38 PM
Great first story. There are a few grammar errors, but nothing that pulls from the story. Be proud of it! Will we get anymore men turned into champions? Will we get a champions' orgy?
11/17/23, 7:24 PM
I loved the descriptions of work gear coupled with hypno inhalants and visuals. The setup to get there was hot too, with men disappearing and a hypnotic bull milk drink in theory this story checks my biggest boxes. I think leaning into those strengths and the work camp setting would be a boon. That said, I couldn’t feel myself get into it and my guess is hypnothrill has the right of it. This could have used more character development to make both the betrayal and the decision to undo mistakes more impactful. The loss of individuality and conversion to drone is more sexually and narratively stimulating when a full person’s thoughts and feelings are subjugated or lost.
11/17/23, 6:41 PM
That was great, I liked the voice in his head saying, "More. More!"
mic
11/17/23, 6:00 PM
so cool ideas, please more, more second raw lockers, the fucker should have emptied his locker out, or he should get locked naked in his locker till next day, or other people should give him humiliating clothes and empty his locker
mic
11/17/23, 5:46 PM
so fucking hot, please more, sell his ass, use him a lot,take every second paycheck of him, let him live tied to bed after work in your basement and take everything
IamTheNight69
11/17/23, 5:28 PM
Wow how deliciously unexpected, you caught me off guard with that plot twist I cannot wait to see where this is going to lead. Well done sir you have me hook, line, and sinker....
Anonymous
11/17/23, 3:36 PM
Man I hope Liam struggles and resists
Kippers
11/14/23, 8:03 PM
I'm sure JT would please the bartender, but that's not a conquest. JT should let Billy's posse see what a trampy cunt he has when JT offers to stuff it. He's done with Billy's broken pussy, but the boys deserve to take turns, while he begs for JT. The bartender could film it. JT is definitely a character to follow, because if he follows, he picks every cherry hole! Good work!

11/17/23, 2:18 PM
@Kippers Thanks man. Appreciate the feedback.