Recent Comments

11/3/23, 5:45 PM
I have a hard-on, from start to finish, I would like to experience that in reality. The whole story, in my opinion, is perverse and excellent. Keep writing my guy.
11/3/23, 5:36 PM
Fucking hot story bru!
11/3/23, 5:16 PM
Just stumbled across this. It desperately needs a continuation.
11/3/23, 4:07 PM
It's quite realistic that it is his own selfishness which eventually causes Chad to recant and change directions, and I appreciate you including that realism. A touch of mental regret colors a deeper longing for his own desires to be fulfilled, which rings true. Beyond the literary goodness, this certainly had a lot of hotness going on! 😛😛🤤🤤
11/3/23, 1:31 PM
Very cute story!
marcori
11/3/23, 1:25 PM
Interesting! Where can I see the rest of this story?
11/3/23, 1:23 PM
Just discovering this story even though your other story has been a favorite. Please come back to writing!
Zander
11/3/23, 1:09 AM
I hope the sequel will be released soon)
11/2/23, 10:00 AM
I look forward for a sequel. But I really think that this story is sufficient in itself. The way it is built and the way it is written make it a whole. What happened before or what happens after are other stories. (That I would be glad to read.) This could be the first chapter of a longer story. Or it could be a novella in an anthology.

11/2/23, 11:40 PM
@[Nephilim](/user/show/941196) Thanks! I wanted to write it in an open ended way that could stand on its own or be continued. I plan to keep going, so I’m glad you liked it.
Anonymous
11/2/23, 9:05 PM
Goodness! You get corporate himbo down to a “T”! I’ll be selfish and hope we get to see a self aware muscle freak in a future installment (e.g. someone who’s disgusted yet turned on by the changes they signed up for)

11/2/23, 9:08 PM
@Anonymous Oh... You will probably like Remanufactured. I personally feel that my entire niche is a more realistic take on the typically extreme fantasies that you see on this site. But I think you're going to enjoy what that story does.

Anonymous
11/2/23, 9:20 PM
@[Nocturne13](/user/show/263497) Oh! Your realistic take is very much noticed. The previous chapter is layered in it in a way that left me on the edge of my seat. That paired with what a real sales pitch would look like in the first chapter. Really great stuff! Guess I’m just a sucker for “be careful what you wish for” tales

11/2/23, 9:52 PM
@Anonymous Oh that's an awesome comment about the previous chapter. Honestly that would have been a great comment to leave me because I really wasn't sure what people thought of that part. I kind of assumed it was just too weird for everybody. It only got about 1/3 of the ratings of the previous chapter. Anyway I agree with you about the careful what you wish for trope! In this particular case, I see the cost of Patrick's wish kind of being canceled out because Sean tried to take more power than he was given. The whole thing rebounds, and Patrick ends up getting off without paying a heavy price for his wish, but instead Sean pays the price for his wish. Well for both of their wishes really.

Anonymous
11/2/23, 10:38 PM
@[Nocturne13](/user/show/263497) Yup, it’s so hard to gauge people’s reactions. Just know you’ve made at least one reader very happy with your work 🙂. 2nd Chapter was probably pretty dense for most. You do you, but I feel like 4K words per chapter is the sweet spot. Not to mean you should shorten your work, but maybe release it in smaller chucks. For me, I (pleasantly) drowned in Patrick’s mindpalace. The contrast of the peaceful mind as he slowly becomes a monster? So good