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Anonymous
10/19/23, 1:22 AM
This is so hot!!! Please make the next one
Anonymous
10/19/23, 12:54 AM
This is so hot!! More please!
Anonymous
10/19/23, 12:41 AM
This was so hot!!! Please make more!
10/19/23, 12:40 AM
Man, I was expecting this to be an Eden academy recruiting story, but the twisted theft + corruption story is even hotter.
10/19/23, 12:22 AM
If i had a nickel for each time someone on this site wrote an eritic gay story (this year) based on that particular Goosebumps book, I'd have two nickels; which isn't a lot, but its still weird its happened twice. As a fan of said book, i loved this. The way they see the transformations in the mirror before they happen, how the light triggers it, and the ambiguity of how much of their minds/ personalities its actually changing are all really well done. In the original book, and the other story on this site, there are people in the mirror who are trying to get out. They use the invisibility/ wishes to change places with their victims. This story doesn't have that; we don't know what the goal of the mirror and mirror figures is, but they don't seem to change places or get out of the mirror. Which i think adds to the story. Since we don't know what the goal is, we don't know what is actually changing. The story isn't actually labeled "dumbing" and Ben claims he's still himself, just bigger and hornier, so we don't know if Gabe it's actually right about his personally and intelligence changing. While Ben does most of the changes to Gabe, Gabe is the one who makes the final change. The mirror had been making them feel good, plus seems to have given them dreams, but we never saw it explicitly control their actions. All of which to say the ambiguity adds a lot to the story and improves on an already interesting concept. Great job. Definitely saving this for later and coming back to it.
10/18/23, 11:35 PM
Baralai, I am always amazed at how inventive your stories are -- and so amazingly hot! Never in a million years would I have imagined a halfway house for troubled young men, led by a female version of Dame Edna, would keep me going from start to finish, but here we are. You deserve to know how great your stuff is. Just...find an editor ;-)
10/18/23, 10:38 PM
Fantastic job! That book embedded itself deep in my brain too. I love that Gabe's the one who took the final step. I gotta explore more creepy houses.
10/18/23, 10:13 PM
I don't remember the original Goosebumps tale but this stands so well on its own. Well done! The trick to get him back and the way the mirror defended itself. The muscle growth and the price of it was a hot dynamic.
10/18/23, 9:20 PM
Terrific muscle growth story -- really got into the head of the protagonist. Well written.
10/18/23, 9:13 PM
The writing could be a bit less jokey/tongue in cheek, but I really liked the idea and concept for this one!