Recent Comments

10/17/23, 10:16 AM
Thank you for the new chapter! I've been re-reading this story's previous chapters last week, imagining how it'll turn out and I can't wait to see more of the family's hot perversions!
Oct 16, 2023
10/17/23, 9:22 AM
Love how the ending plays out. Please continue this!
10/17/23, 5:22 AM
Amazing story! I love the twists and turns, and since Robert is such a jerk (I don't like it when the cocky jerks win), I hope he gets a taste of his own medicine. But we'll have to wait and see!

10/17/23, 6:17 AM
@[Feed Your Head](/user/show/1170832) Thanks. I am still thinking about how to conclude things with Robert but it will definitely be an exciting ending!
10/17/23, 5:21 AM
I don't understand why you would take good men and make them arrogant toxic DILFs. They were cruel to their wives and the wives didn't deserve such treatment. What is that place's end game?
10/17/23, 3:11 AM
Please, please, a crumb of chapter 3
10/17/23, 1:09 AM
Wish the dad was a slave on the cabin
Zander
10/15/23, 10:41 PM
The story is certainly funny but at the same time stupid. Professor X can easily return everyone back to normal, Jean Gray can also do this easily, Emma Frost and many other characters. In the world of comics, mind control or the like of this ability is not a powerful force over which there is no control.

10/16/23, 3:15 AM
@[Zander](/user/show/10015044) Thank you for your comment. If Professor X, Jean Grey, or Emma Frost existed in this universe it would make perfect sense for the heroes to go to them first. Since they don't, they have fewer options. Other readers have come to the conclusion this story does not take place in the 616 universe, which is correct. Also, if you've read stories with The Purple Man you'll know it's not so easy to resist his control. The Handler is partially based on him. Anyway, please don't leave comments on people's stories saying they're "stupid" in the future. It's pretty rude! If you don't like it, don't read it.

Zander
10/16/23, 9:57 AM
@[Manicorn](/user/show/10041123) Then you should have indicated that it takes place in an alternate universe and that some important characters are missing from your story. When you write a story, you must be prepared for any criticism, no matter what it may be. I’m going to write a story myself (unfortunately I don’t have time yet) But I already have a concept and a plot (and I’m ready for any criticism, no matter how harsh it is) Because in this way I can improve something in my stories in the future.

10/16/23, 1:15 PM
@[Zander](/user/show/10015044) No, I must not be prepared for "any" criticism because there are constructive and nonconstructive ways to leave comments. Yours was nonconstructive. The proper thing to do when an author asks you not to leave such comments is to simply apologize and try not to do it again. The fact you instead went on the offensive tells me you're not a person worth talking to further. Also, be aware of the type of story you're commenting on. This is a hypno-spanking kink story posted on a hypno fetish website. Would any of the characters you named be welcome in this kind of story? Would you want them to simply "fix" the hypnosis and undo the villain's work? Would that make the story hotter, or more fun?

10/16/23, 4:30 PM
@[Zander](/user/show/10015044) Please get off your high horse good sir. Not everyone is here to brush up their doctorate in english. While its okay to give criticism, you could have worded it abit kinder. And you could say you are under no obligation to mince your words for the author, while i dont speak for the author, i think he isnt really looking for your criticism, nor does he care for it either. And as Manicorn pointed out above, its a sexy story about heroes getting spanked. Why are you thinking so hard into it? Just enjoy the story, or dont read it if you dont enjoy these kinds of kinks Have a good day.

Zander
10/16/23, 4:46 PM
@[Manicorn](/user/show/10041123) In fact, you are wrong and my criticism is quite constructive, you just don’t like the criticism and for some reason you are offended by it. Anyone can publish their opinion that they want. You yourself did not indicate that the story is an alternative to the Marvel universe (you made a mistake ) I pointed this out. You yourself said that there is no Charles Xavier, Jean Gray, etc. in this universe? Then who brought the mutants together and united them at school? Therefore, it looks ridiculous (that you have plot holes in your story) I just pointed out this (and for some reason you were offended and immediately got personal). Of course, I’m not going to argue with you further and prove something if you don’t see the truth You are already an adult and I am not going to convince you.

Zander
10/16/23, 4:55 PM
@[Moose](/user/show/908031) Where is it more gentle to criticize? In my opinion, I wrote everything quite gently about the story. I didn’t write anything very bad about the story and the author himself. I just pointed out that there are plot holes that need to be closed. I am for the truth and truth, I will not apologize to the author (like him he himself suggested to me). If he doesn’t like what I wrote, let him ignore me. And yes, sorry for the English (you see, this is not my native language) so there may be errors in the text. I think you should have understood this by reading what I wrote (I hope you didn’t consider me illiterate because of this) ​

Martin
10/16/23, 8:51 PM
Ok guys, I think you've all exchanged your point of view by now. Anything else will just be personal, and that's just not necessary. For what it's worth I can see both Zander's point as well as why Manicorn was offended by his way of wording it. Now just everyone be cool and enjoy what Manicorn has written! Have fun and keep spilling protein :)
10/16/23, 6:39 PM
Fuuuck this is hot! Can’t wait to see them grow into dumb, massive beasts! However, I really do hope Robert gets some karma in the end!

10/16/23, 8:12 PM
@[Bigger](/user/show/230293) Glad you like it. This is still my first story so I know there are parts I could improve but I think I've got one more chapter to wrap things up!
10/16/23, 8:03 PM
Great start!
Oct 16, 2023
10/16/23, 8:02 PM
Oh heck yes. Pits, leather and submitting to a cock with a worshipful blowjob. Doesn't get much better!