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10/3/23, 1:05 PM
The other stories were very enjoyable too.

10/3/23, 9:48 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed them
nobody
10/3/23, 7:55 PM
i think you might have gotten "prologue" and "epilogue" mixed up

10/3/23, 9:31 PM
@[nobody](/user/show/930612) I think so and thank you
Martin
10/3/23, 7:37 PM
That's really amazingly intense... I'm glad I can already read the next chapter :)
Jan 1, 2013
Peter
10/3/23, 7:18 PM
wow Jack was forced turned into an addict, awesome story.
10/3/23, 7:13 PM
That was a fantastic chapter. 👍👍👍 I can't wait to read the next one but no pressure to finish fast. Your writing was so good here 👍
9/25/23, 6:49 PM
It's a very hot story! I have to use Google trad to understand it, and it butchers some phrases, so I can't really judge if it's *well*-written, but I do like the ideas, and it's fun to have a story with an actual gay couple facing off against an hypnosis, they aren't a lot of those on the site!

Yoshi
9/25/23, 7:03 PM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) thanks for the comment, unfortunately my english is not good enough to write such long and complex stories. I'm happy that you appreciate the idea anyway, this time I wanted to try to develop the characters a bit, the relationships between them.

10/3/23, 7:13 PM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) I'm a native English speaker who has been living in Italy for almost a decade and I can tell you that the story is very well written. I'll give you a little example. In Italian, unlike in English, there exist different pronouns and forms of address depending on the relationship and rank between people. In English we address everyone with the pronoun _you_. In Italian there are very distinct familiar pronouns for this: _tu_ between young people and friends and family members and _lei_ between young people and older people and between work colleagues and toward officials. The verb conjugations change based on this as well so that the relationship between two people is always very clear based on how they are speaking with one another. This is always present in "The Carabinieri Academy" and really adds another layer to the story. Another thing to keep in mind is that the carabinieri in Italy are not just the police but are in fact a specialized branch of the military and their organization is actually older than the unified state of Italy itself. Becoming a carabiniere is not so much taking on a job as taking on a worldview and a way of life, which is very particular and doesn't really exist in the USA or the UK in the same way. This all makes the hypnosis plot even more effective, since it is contextualized within a military environment based on order and discipline and honor.
10/3/23, 6:59 PM
Sarei fuori dal coro, ma io non trovo il capitolo né "unsexy" né spoiler. Il fascino, invece, sta nelle sfumature e questa puntata è ricca di dettagli. Un esempio basterebbe, ovvero quello del professore Locatelli, che ha cambiato totalmente in maniera eclatante. È proprio l'insieme di tutto che rende verosimile il mondo di questo racconto, ovvero il mondo di un'accademia militare. Poi, va detto, che l'autore deve lasciare delle "briciole" di informazione per far sviluppare la trama; non è detto che le sorprese sono già esaurite, anzi penso che l'intreccio diventerà sempre più complicato ed elaborato. Trovo molto bello il fermento che sta aumentando tra i protagonisti (e non solo), nonché il loro disagio e la ricerca contro il tempo per capire cosa sta succedendo. Il legame tra i tre personaggi principali si evidenzia sempre più solido e sono sicuro che sarà grazie a loro che l'accademia o si salva o si perde. Non ci mancherà neanche il lato gay/affirming, figuriamoci sexy... ragazzi, ci troviamo in una scuola composta totalmente di maschi, pensate che vada diversamente? Concludo con un'osservazione: mi piace molto il misto di "acqua e sapone" e intrigo, di luci e ombre, insomma di tutto ciò che caratterizza un mondo che comprende sia ragazzini con gli occhi lucidi di sogni sia una regola ferrea con una storia di oltre due secoli alle spalle. Porti avanti, Yoshi, che siamo agli ordini!
Anonymous
10/3/23, 5:41 PM
Very interesting premise and nice set-up, can’t wait to read what happens next!
8/12/20, 7:14 PM
more please!!!

Anonymous
10/3/23, 5:36 PM
@[Nurseboy](/user/show/919128) I LOVE your name!
10/3/23, 3:35 PM
One of my favorite stories of all time!