Recent Comments

9/25/23, 7:02 PM
Please continue this story!! Im loving it!!
9/25/23, 8:09 AM
I think its a good try but i think it suffers from the same problem a lot of the mass enslavement stories suffer from. it’s actually not that hot for everyone to get assimilated. you built up this tension with ryan and tevor but when they both get assimilated it kind of never really pays off on it. it also is 95 percent set up 5 percent sexy stuff. feels like there should have been more about the transformation and sex for the amount of time we took to get there. it really ended quickly once stuff started to happen

9/25/23, 1:43 PM
@[Kodafox](/user/show/930890) I think that's a great critique, Kodafox. Of course, it takes more time to write the slow, creepy build (which is why I have so many unfinished stories on my hard drive), but it can pay off in delivering a sexier story. I can imagine a version of this story where the rubber doesn't automatically take people over, but it's a slow drone conversion, and Trevor comes across some half-converted men in the woods, trying to escape and struggling with the rubber taking over their minds. And then he runs back to find Ryan, who he thinks is still normal, but...

9/25/23, 4:09 PM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) I think this is something my writing skills simply still lack in, detailing the actual transformation. Probably a case of too little experience, and your idea will definitely help and inspire for my next story!
9/25/23, 4:07 PM
Thanks!!
9/25/23, 2:22 PM
Hopefully this gets a part 2

9/25/23, 2:36 PM
@[Allan Weiss](/user/show/472888) Well, if enough people ask. I suppose there could be a sequel called handling Hardy …anybody up for an electric toys lol. I wish someone would rate the story here too, Hinthaha

Anonymous
9/25/23, 3:29 PM
@[Kyle Cicero](/user/show/10023983) Yes I think there is definitely a narrative thread to explore with who is in the audience. He knows an ex is watching… maybe the ex orchestrated this? Or another rival of some sort? Not sure why but that “realization” of Hardy definitely piqued my interest
9/25/23, 2:43 PM
F-ing love this story and concept, keep em comin!
9/24/23, 11:12 PM
I could feel its awesomeness even after reading this through an automatic translation. I particularly liked the last line, the first step towards an eternal hell.

9/25/23, 1:55 PM
@[Minami-Kuma](/user/show/1426781) Thank you so much! I’m really glad you liked it! ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
Anonymous
9/25/23, 1:07 PM
I want a reversal of fortune and for him to become an alpha top
9/25/23, 8:50 AM
Kyle I believe you wrote a story about an MP that was hypnotized by a prisoner. In the end the MP ended up with a tat that read Semper Fido. What’s the name of the story? It was a hot one.

9/25/23, 11:22 AM
@[tanners92](/user/show/963694) That is an oldie. I believe it was called the prisoner exchange.

Anonymous
9/25/23, 11:23 AM
@[Kyle Cicero](/user/show/10023983) Any chance you would repost it on here? Thanks.

9/25/23, 12:23 PM
@Anonymous Sorry no. It’s part of a collection of short stories in an e-book on Amazon. The price is reasonable, check it out

Martin
9/25/23, 12:33 PM
@[Kyle Cicero](/user/show/10023983) Link to it!
KP
9/25/23, 12:22 PM
Thank you! Since the beginning I have been hanging on for the next edition-chapter. So good!!!! Thanks again! Looking forward to Sinners and Saints-The Campus Tales!
KP
9/25/23, 12:17 PM
Thank You!!!!