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Mic
1/9/23, 8:52 PM
Jo super Story , please more

Callum
9/25/23, 9:24 PM
@Mic honestly i need the mc to get uncaged and fucking ryder finally
9/25/23, 9:12 PM
Poor Bryan, I'm starting to feel a little bad for him. Chester basically threw him into an alternate universe that's driving him insane (for sounding like insane)...but then he really hasn't even done anything wrong or bad to Chester before (he barely even noticed Chester). But I'm sure you'll have an eventual 'fate' for Bryan and how he'll be fitted into the chaos that Chester is building. I can see that you have definitely put more effort into fleshing out the storyline some more, which is great a enhancing the overall completeness and enjoyment of the story. But for me, I enjoy Edlam's stories for being its own genre of blatant chaotic debaucheries. Just like there are chick flicks, rom coms and deep arthouse dramas, they all have their own greatness in them depending on your tastes and interests. For an erotic hypno story, it's great as long it gets the juices flowing...be it plot heavy or sex heavy! :stuck_out_tongue_winking_eye:
Oct 24, 2018
9/25/23, 9:10 PM
Feels like they're a part missing about the beginning of the second visit, but still pretty well done! Fun stuff, even if a bit confused about what's happening towards teh end (the tailor turned an halloween party into a gay furry convention? That's what I've got. o_O Interesting, but if that's the case, that came off as confused in the text.)
9/25/23, 8:59 PM
Really good start, I hope we will get some of that daddy action later on! :grin:
9/25/23, 8:33 PM
Unique concept.
9/25/23, 8:29 PM
Ngl the fact the 3cm gummy dick was _uncut_ made me giggle. much-appreciated nuance and good execution
9/25/23, 7:02 PM
Please continue this story!! Im loving it!!
9/25/23, 8:09 AM
I think its a good try but i think it suffers from the same problem a lot of the mass enslavement stories suffer from. it’s actually not that hot for everyone to get assimilated. you built up this tension with ryan and tevor but when they both get assimilated it kind of never really pays off on it. it also is 95 percent set up 5 percent sexy stuff. feels like there should have been more about the transformation and sex for the amount of time we took to get there. it really ended quickly once stuff started to happen

9/25/23, 1:43 PM
@[Kodafox](/user/show/930890) I think that's a great critique, Kodafox. Of course, it takes more time to write the slow, creepy build (which is why I have so many unfinished stories on my hard drive), but it can pay off in delivering a sexier story. I can imagine a version of this story where the rubber doesn't automatically take people over, but it's a slow drone conversion, and Trevor comes across some half-converted men in the woods, trying to escape and struggling with the rubber taking over their minds. And then he runs back to find Ryan, who he thinks is still normal, but...

9/25/23, 4:09 PM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) I think this is something my writing skills simply still lack in, detailing the actual transformation. Probably a case of too little experience, and your idea will definitely help and inspire for my next story!
9/25/23, 4:07 PM
Thanks!!
9/25/23, 2:22 PM
Hopefully this gets a part 2

9/25/23, 2:36 PM
@[Allan Weiss](/user/show/472888) Well, if enough people ask. I suppose there could be a sequel called handling Hardy …anybody up for an electric toys lol. I wish someone would rate the story here too, Hinthaha

Anonymous
9/25/23, 3:29 PM
@[Kyle Cicero](/user/show/10023983) Yes I think there is definitely a narrative thread to explore with who is in the audience. He knows an ex is watching… maybe the ex orchestrated this? Or another rival of some sort? Not sure why but that “realization” of Hardy definitely piqued my interest