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9/25/23, 5:29 AM
Love it
9/25/23, 4:07 AM
Excelente....¿Qué más pasó?
9/25/23, 1:58 AM
God, I love magical food tfs
9/25/23, 12:52 AM
Just hope that Chester gets to work on completely changing Bryans attitude [turn him into the total 'scum-bag' of a 100% 'dirty-old man'], so that when he returns back from his sick day, he is a real 'total-sexual-'sicko' in every way !!!....Perhaps EdIam could find it in his heart to get into some office bathroom antics as well. Isn't it time for Bryan to have his memory altered, as well as his former reality ???
Anonymous
9/24/23, 8:52 PM
The story is hot overall, but it definitely needs some grammatical improvements.
9/24/23, 6:23 PM
6'6" and 140lbs. That is dangerously thin. Like a walking skeleton. Around 190 is the expected minimum weight for an "average" male. Different body type might fall out side the average but not -50lbs.

9/24/23, 6:35 PM
@[HollowPup](/user/show/908115) Actually, the measurements are based on a real person and I can assure you that while they are lean they’re certainly not a skeleton.

9/24/23, 7:38 PM
@[HollowPup](/user/show/908115) Also, this is a commissioned story so the character’s image is based upon what the person commissioning the story wishes. :-) . Side note : thank you for taking the time to comment too. Other than that issue, I hope you enjoyed the story.
Anonymous
9/24/23, 7:33 PM
so good!!!
9/24/23, 6:55 PM
Three chapters in and the heroes have already discovered who the villain is, his _modus operandi_ and general objective. It sounds rushed to me, but at the same time this series is so unsexy that I'm sure some plot twist or a secret perversion of the villain is about to be revealed. I'm interested in reading to find out.

Yoshi
9/24/23, 7:20 PM
@[Sexcrab](/user/show/10027159) thanks for the comment, I'm trying something different, I hope that in the end the story will please and convince.
9/23/23, 7:08 AM
You list Ari's last name as Steiner here but in the poll it is Gold. I hope his stepfather can be pulled into the game since he sounds like a jerk.

9/24/23, 4:24 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) That name discrepancy is definitely an artistic choice and not a reflection of how quickly I threw this together. :)

9/24/23, 7:18 PM
@[S. Q. Neemie](/user/show/767920) Fair Enough.
9/24/23, 7:04 PM
OMG, well done!!! Excited for more horrific chaos <3