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9/24/23, 6:23 PM
6'6" and 140lbs. That is dangerously thin. Like a walking skeleton. Around 190 is the expected minimum weight for an "average" male. Different body type might fall out side the average but not -50lbs.

9/24/23, 6:35 PM
@[HollowPup](/user/show/908115) Actually, the measurements are based on a real person and I can assure you that while they are lean they’re certainly not a skeleton.

9/24/23, 7:38 PM
@[HollowPup](/user/show/908115) Also, this is a commissioned story so the character’s image is based upon what the person commissioning the story wishes. :-) . Side note : thank you for taking the time to comment too. Other than that issue, I hope you enjoyed the story.
Anonymous
9/24/23, 7:33 PM
so good!!!
9/24/23, 6:55 PM
Three chapters in and the heroes have already discovered who the villain is, his _modus operandi_ and general objective. It sounds rushed to me, but at the same time this series is so unsexy that I'm sure some plot twist or a secret perversion of the villain is about to be revealed. I'm interested in reading to find out.

Yoshi
9/24/23, 7:20 PM
@[Sexcrab](/user/show/10027159) thanks for the comment, I'm trying something different, I hope that in the end the story will please and convince.
9/23/23, 7:08 AM
You list Ari's last name as Steiner here but in the poll it is Gold. I hope his stepfather can be pulled into the game since he sounds like a jerk.

9/24/23, 4:24 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) That name discrepancy is definitely an artistic choice and not a reflection of how quickly I threw this together. :)

9/24/23, 7:18 PM
@[S. Q. Neemie](/user/show/767920) Fair Enough.
9/24/23, 7:04 PM
OMG, well done!!! Excited for more horrific chaos <3
9/24/23, 5:49 PM
Great story! Love this family, will we get a chance to see more of their dad?
9/24/23, 5:27 PM
So happy you’re back. Who are the guys you’ve cast as Ethan and Sean?
9/24/23, 5:22 PM
A second chapter is in the works!
9/24/23, 4:19 PM
Hot story, but it needs a little bit of editing; at some points (starting, I think, with Paragraph 4) you get Trevor and Ryan's names reversed.

9/24/23, 4:45 PM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) Thanks for your feedback! The names in the kiss scene were on me, at the reception I initially wanted Ryan to be the one suspicious of the campground as he knows less about it, but it does make more sense to give that one to Trevor as he’s the one going investigating in the end. I’ve changed it around a bit, will definitely keep that in mind for my next story :)
9/22/23, 6:51 PM
Love your stories! Hoping Hatim gets to top some of these contestants--loved your Christmas muzak "toys" chapter. Definitely see the frat bro getting turned into a bottom. Looking forward to next chapters!

9/24/23, 4:23 PM
@[Botbot](/user/show/10010276) Aw, a blast from the past! Still one of my favorite stories.