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9/13/23, 4:05 AM
Hell yeah!! 😛😛
9/13/23, 3:38 AM
I need more of this AND Fear Itself!
Mind Bender
9/13/23, 2:56 AM
Wow this was amazing! I love the effects of the first wish, and of course what happens after☺️. This was one of my favorite chapters.
9/8/23, 5:00 AM
I forgot to mention one aspect about this series that I haven't really repeated in my other stories. This aspect is the pack or coven. It's literally called "The Brethren" or "The Brotherhood". In my other stories, the characters become mindless drones. And in addition, all characters usually exist on a similar social hierarchy. But not in my first story. The silver figure is definitely the Master, and the other men are is progeny. Think of them like those vampire movies, cause that's kind of where I was drawing inspiration. If you're implanted with a symbiote, you don't really lose your personality. Instead, you just feel an unquestioning loyalty or allegiance to your Master. Because the symbiote was implanted by him, you become his slave. I'm pointing this out because I don't think I've repeated this group dynamic since. I'm not sure why I haven't. I'm definitely attracted to the drone / group hive mentality. But I also like that the Brethren, while they retain personality and independence, are fiercely loyal to each other and their Master. I just see it as if some kind of chemical is introduced into your body. And no matter how much you fight or try to resist, this chemical forces your mind to imprint on another person. It would be a great form of mind control. There's no visual hypnotic spiral. No subliminal audio messages. Just chemistry. Your brain is altered because another person introduced something into your body, and you suddenly belong to him. I actually find the methodology a bit more insidious. :)

nycboot
9/13/23, 1:23 AM
@[rubbrsome](/user/show/13662) You must have a very different view of your stories than we, your fans. What about that story (whose title I forget) but where the protagonists are absorbed into a brotherhood - where you have this unforgettable end because you describe them as singing in the same choir. And there's another story where the man and the son get taken in....
9/13/23, 1:04 AM
Loving this story so far! Hoping that Straga gets to keep Ezra.
Swizzington
7/26/20, 11:31 PM
Just a quick little thing I whipped up for fun :-) Do people generally enjoy the diary/journal format? They're quite easy to write so I'm thinking I might do a few more in this style.

9/12/23, 9:11 PM
@Swizzington I really enjoy this format

9/13/23, 12:44 AM
@Swizzington Oh, yes, I enjoy it a ton. Epistolaries too!
Sep 10, 2023
9/13/23, 12:34 AM
exactly what i needed, thank you
9/12/23, 4:32 PM
Surprisingly good series. I randomly clicked on 1st part and stayed till here. Good job

9/12/23, 10:42 PM
@[Iriefall](/user/show/10019488) I'm glad you are enjoying it!
9/12/23, 8:46 PM
I have to agree with Hypnothrill; that the whole scene of Troy's escape was hot. For me I'm always turned on by the communal aspect of hypnosis and mind control and you were able to do that very well. The whole groupthink of wanting to go back to the spiral and group mastrubation really has been something I strive to put in my writing; to see you do it is a big inspiration for me.
9/12/23, 8:21 PM
I'm still loving this series! The scene with Troy trying to convince them to escape while the narrator and the other boys just want to return to the spiral was incredibly hot.