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8/30/23, 9:48 AM
Keep going please
8/30/23, 7:12 AM
Wow, that was great! I'm not normally into fantasy but this pushed my buttons big time! Hope there's more to come soon...
shoejock
8/30/23, 4:50 AM
Fuck this was hot, i want to hear more details about the sucking and mindlessness
8/30/23, 12:41 AM
Amazing chapter! Really love the insane number of fetishes you explored even if the animal fucking was not my favourite after a certain point. I would really love mpreg to come into this properly - Dan and Greg both seem like they'd have loved to get pregnant in this chapter and the plants impregnating everyone was super hot.
8/29/23, 11:54 PM
Great story. I hope there's more to cum!
8/29/23, 10:19 PM
Absolutely brilliant.

8/29/23, 10:27 PM
@[Essex](/user/show/909447) Cheers! This was a lot of fun.
8/29/23, 9:33 PM
Hot story, especially when Frank first falls under the power of the Green Man. Looking forward to the next chapter!

8/29/23, 10:26 PM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) same here
Anonymous
8/27/23, 9:53 AM
I'm a bit confused by this story. Obviously English isn't your first language which is perfectly fine you may just want to find someone to edit or look over your stories. The biggest problem I have is there isn't really any background information. I get it at the end but we are put in this world with no context. We don't know what a second maturity is or what it entails, we don't know that these guys are fucking eachother on the reg. It's all implied. If thats a creative choice that we have to put the world together I can respect that but if its not maybe a prologue or introduction story might fit. I saw that you read lukes big butt changes on your profile. The author of that did an introduction in the form of a script for an informational video. I'll link it below. Just my two cents feel free to disregard. https://www.gayspiralstories.com/series/show/10000219

8/29/23, 9:51 PM
@Anonymous Thank you for taking the time to read my story. Indeed, English isn't my first language. There are several clues I deliberately left as evidence of that. The grammatical errors are my fault for blindly trusting the translator in the GPT chat, which couldn't handle some idiomatic expressions. Regarding the second thing you brought up, the fact that the reader has to uncover the rules of this universe as they read about it is (in fact) the crux of the matter. An introduction would have been plausible. It also would have killed the air of mystery.
8/29/23, 9:44 PM
I really liked the story. If I could give a suggestion would be to expand a bit more about Mitchell and how he was influenced by the video as much as you went into detail with Bryan. Overall, great story and I look forward to reading more with Bryan, Mitchell and Jacob.
8/29/23, 4:31 AM
What a hot finale. Even though im not a fan of the villains winning, ill accept this. The twist and turn. I enjoyed this twisted tale of superheroes and villains.

8/29/23, 9:27 PM
@[DJeiKier](/user/show/10021357) Thank you very much! I have to admit that I _wanted_ to give the pair a happy ending, but it slipped through my fingers as I wrote the last few chapters.