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Anonymous
8/5/23, 8:17 PM
Matty will likely prevail in the end,but the pervert in me,and privately just loves EVIL EDDIE.Kinda wished he'd get the other entrapped men to embrace their darker evil side and poor little Matty will end up in a gang-bang,which would be hot even with the slaves being mindless
8/4/23, 6:39 AM
Yay you're back!! A hot chapter for a hot story in a hot dimension! I can't believe we finally found out what is this war they are all preparing for! Sounds like a battle I would love to take part in. Then again, I might be too busy falling into the water, clumsy me. It's very interesting to see the interaction between those three (even though Talley can be a douche sometimes). I wonder what will happen when Marco meets Nate's new friends. I can't decide if I should gamble on Marco being jealous or not. Can't wait for the next chapter!

8/5/23, 7:55 PM
@[Reader](/user/show/780823) Heh, seems I've been edging the readers on frat warfare all this time, but the secret was going to come out eventually! In future revisions of the story I might make it clearer earlier on--maybe even in the first chapter. We'll see. I also really appreciate how excited you are about this story; that kind of thing helps give me motivation to keep going when the writing gets tough. Talley can be a douche, but (at least for him) it's all in good fun, and Nate seems to think it's part of the 'bro code', even if Arik disagrees. I hope you enjoyed the interactions!
7/18/23, 10:59 PM
As always, another wonderful chapter, Soren. And it's great to see months of preparation, planning, and writing come to fruition! The interactions between Talley and Nate were the highlight of the chapter for me, personally, and I can't wait to see how more outrageous the two boys will get in their efforts to prove their manhood to the other. And your refs, as usual, are all mouthwatering! You have _very_ good taste! Keep up the great work!

8/5/23, 7:49 PM
@[Franco Apollo](/user/show/10029736) Two bottom-coded frat boys with a chip on their shoulder? Who knows what shenanigans they'll get up to... I'm really glad you enjoyed it; it took me long enough to finally get it out, but I'm glad I did!
Anonymous
8/5/23, 7:19 PM
Please please PLEASE make a sequel to this! I really wanna know what happens inside that magic box (also wanna go there ahahaha)
8/5/23, 4:47 AM
I really liked this a lot. I often judge how hot I'm finding a particular story based on how many "goes" it takes me to make it all the way through, cuz often I'll be stroking to a story and I get to some particularly hot part and I just decide that's where I'm gonna unload cuz it's so good. And then when I come back to it again I'll go to right around that spot and maybe start a little before to get a running start back into it. This story took me 6 times to get thru. I did have the thought as the story was going on that maybe there was gonna be a twist at the end, that the whole thing with Quentin was a trick just to get Seamus. Cuz this whole thing with Rich and size queens started with Quentin pointing out the first couple of posts. After that there's no direct contact between Seamus and Quentin. Quentin texts him that they were gonna remain roommates, but that's it. When Seamus goes over to Quentin's place and hears him totally worshipping Rich thru the door, he doesn't ACTUALLY see what they're doing. It could have been staged for his benefit, if Quentin was in on the whole thing. And after that Quentin is pretty much silent no matter how much Seamus tries to contact him. So one possible ending I had in my head was that after Seamus goes full-on size queen for Rich, that Quentin would walk in and be like "I can't believe how fast he got you. I guess I owe Rich and his big dick $50. But that doesn't mean I don't get to use you too" and Quentin might haul out his own huge cock, and Quentin and Rich would be laughing and high-fiving each other while Seamus has to service them both. But as I went on it seemed that all was as it was presented. I mean, I guess. We never did see Quentin again. We assume he's been in his dorm room this whole time using a dildo on himself and wishing it was Rich. Amazing story. Very well read. I'm interested for the author reveal as well.

8/5/23, 7:17 PM
@[Pwrliftermscl](/user/show/941605) Wow, six times! That is *quite* the compliment! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story! 😄 I like your idea for the twist! It'd be a very different story for sure, but also a fun one. And yeah, I did have Quentin 'vanish' on purpose, though it was less for a twist, and more to build up that sense of claustrophobia and dread. I was borrowing from horror movie tropes for this story, honestly, and how in those movies it can be so effective if the best friend just 'vanishes' and leaves the main character panicked over what could have happened to them (versus, say, something as obvious as seeing the friend get stabbed on camera by the killer). The ambiguity over the friend's exact fate and the creeping dread makes it more intense, I think, and forces our imaginations to go into overdrive... especially if the protagonist has a growing feeling in the pit of their stomach of *oh god, I'm next.* So I tried to channel that a bit for this story, but in an erotic way instead of a scary way, ha. I hope it was effective!
8/5/23, 5:20 PM
I love the idea of goonstench just taking over the whole school, and yeah it obviously starts in the boy's locker room but then it stinks up the whole gym and the mess halls, classrooms aren't even safe- and don't get me started on auditoriums!
7/24/23, 1:49 AM
This really hits my buttons and the writing is very good. I'd just say don't try to ram the descriptions in so hard at the start. It's jarring and the reader knows you're trying to get the descriptive stuff in too much, but you can tell later on you're way better at slipping the details in then. I think it's a lot more natural for you to take your time on the descriptive bits than try to push too much in right up front, and you've got the writing talent to do that for sure!

Author (name hidden)
8/5/23, 4:50 PM
@[edhypnofan](/user/show/10002490) Yeah, sorry. Was my first time writing a TF story, and I was a bit rushing to not hit deadline, could not make the description smoother. But I felt it was needed to get a bit of an idea of what everyone looked like early on. Thanks!
8/4/23, 3:22 PM
Just when I was thinking about the pharaoh's story! Fun worldbuilding. OwO

8/5/23, 3:58 PM
@[BobbyBlobfish](/user/show/700733) There are many, many stories that have been unknown to humanity so far.
peter
8/5/23, 3:30 PM
need another chapter please.
8/5/23, 1:12 PM
THAT was the best story I have read in such a long long time. The recollections from Jack and Tristan are brilliant. PLEASE write a follow up. Your writing style is just PERFECTION