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8/1/23, 5:19 AM
This is a cool idea! It’s a pity I didn’t read it right when I saw it, but I haven’t been in much of a reading mood. I like the tension between Aiden and Bryan there; I’ll go find out more right now, huh?
8/1/23, 2:03 AM
Came 3 times reading it. It's that good!

8/1/23, 5:04 AM
@[Gasp](/user/show/10006939) Wow, thank you, that is _very_ high praise, haha! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Q
7/20/23, 2:15 PM
Is there gonna be a sequel?

8/1/23, 3:55 AM
@Q No plans for a sequel. I just write one-shots and games.
7/17/23, 11:54 AM
Would love to read more stories like this extremely well written.

8/1/23, 3:54 AM
@[Darby Thomas](/user/show/10017156) Well come back after the author reveal. I've got a couple more stories that I think are pretty great.
7/30/23, 9:52 PM
Oh good LORD, what an ENDING! I’m a sucker for sweet stories about love, and watching Will and Connor confess their feelings is so cute. And yet you did a great job providing a sinister undercurrent: love or not, they’ve still been brainwashed into being into gaining and laziness. Was the love always there, or is it a result of the experiment? Or does it matter? That IS a _riddle_, isn’t it… Also, the scene where all of the guys join together and feast has that similar dichotomy: joy at them being reunited, but also sinister in the fact that they were hypnotized to have totally different personalities. Amazing! In addition to a big fat epilogue, it would be cool to hear a detail that the plan has been working in other countries—a sign that the experiment was a success. Congratulations on your incredible story! :)

8/1/23, 2:31 AM
@[Feed Your Head](/user/show/1170832) Yeees the dubious nature of all relationships was an interesting concept I wanted to tackle, that and the guilt if enabling or interfering in peoples relations. Im happy you liked it 💚
slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
7/30/23, 6:53 PM
Sorry to see the story end. I always enjoy reading about in-shape straight men becoming fat, over-indulgent gay pigs! But it was a good ending, nonetheless.

8/1/23, 2:29 AM
@slavethruhypno@yahoo.com Thanks for the comments, Im thinking about expanding the story outside of camp but we will see hehe there is always more guys to corrupt
8/1/23, 2:28 AM
The world building is so cool, cant wait to see where it goes next!
8/1/23, 12:06 AM
Your world-building, even on a small.scale, is great, Cockatrice. The attention to detail you put into everything, and the way you use dialog between characters to talk it out, is always intriguing.
Anonymous
7/31/23, 11:28 PM
Ooh, is Matt finally thinking of trying to face Eddie head-on? Beat him at his own game? Well, it might be fun to watch him fail, in any case :rofl: So this might sound strange, considering everything else going on in this story, but I felt that the detective divorcing his wife and abandoning his kids was a little too harsh. I guess because there was collateral damage beyond just the guys who directly crossed paths with Eddie. If the point was just to show how straight he was before being brainwashed, I'd have preferred if that was expressed through him being a ladies' man, or at most being engaged or something. I dunno, that's just my personal thought. Everything else was smoking hot as usual. It's always fun to see Eddie win. I think he brings up a good point towards the end of this chapter: Matt's the common thread that has brought all of Eddie's victims to him. What if, in the end, he decides to embrace that role and become Eddie's "recruiter"? Dunno if Eddie will ever deign to give him the gift of mindlessness like his other slaves, but maybe if Matthew's a good boy he'll let him suck his dick every now and then. Oh, and speaking of mindlessness, we really need a victim PoV chapter! Seeing the brainwashing process firsthand is always hot, and it'd be a good way to mix things up a bit. Entertaining as it is, the story's kind of starting to repeat itself at this point.
7/31/23, 3:46 AM
Just gonna add my voice to the chorus here -- an amazing execution of a common trope around here, revivifying it. Such good writing, so incredibly erotic, and told from the perfect perspective. Kudos!

7/31/23, 9:17 PM
@[DaymionMC](/user/show/10033419) Thank you so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!