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slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
7/30/23, 6:53 PM
Sorry to see the story end. I always enjoy reading about in-shape straight men becoming fat, over-indulgent gay pigs! But it was a good ending, nonetheless.

8/1/23, 2:29 AM
@slavethruhypno@yahoo.com Thanks for the comments, Im thinking about expanding the story outside of camp but we will see hehe there is always more guys to corrupt
8/1/23, 2:28 AM
The world building is so cool, cant wait to see where it goes next!
8/1/23, 12:06 AM
Your world-building, even on a small.scale, is great, Cockatrice. The attention to detail you put into everything, and the way you use dialog between characters to talk it out, is always intriguing.
Anonymous
7/31/23, 11:28 PM
Ooh, is Matt finally thinking of trying to face Eddie head-on? Beat him at his own game? Well, it might be fun to watch him fail, in any case :rofl: So this might sound strange, considering everything else going on in this story, but I felt that the detective divorcing his wife and abandoning his kids was a little too harsh. I guess because there was collateral damage beyond just the guys who directly crossed paths with Eddie. If the point was just to show how straight he was before being brainwashed, I'd have preferred if that was expressed through him being a ladies' man, or at most being engaged or something. I dunno, that's just my personal thought. Everything else was smoking hot as usual. It's always fun to see Eddie win. I think he brings up a good point towards the end of this chapter: Matt's the common thread that has brought all of Eddie's victims to him. What if, in the end, he decides to embrace that role and become Eddie's "recruiter"? Dunno if Eddie will ever deign to give him the gift of mindlessness like his other slaves, but maybe if Matthew's a good boy he'll let him suck his dick every now and then. Oh, and speaking of mindlessness, we really need a victim PoV chapter! Seeing the brainwashing process firsthand is always hot, and it'd be a good way to mix things up a bit. Entertaining as it is, the story's kind of starting to repeat itself at this point.
7/31/23, 3:46 AM
Just gonna add my voice to the chorus here -- an amazing execution of a common trope around here, revivifying it. Such good writing, so incredibly erotic, and told from the perfect perspective. Kudos!

7/31/23, 9:17 PM
@[DaymionMC](/user/show/10033419) Thank you so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
7/31/23, 9:08 PM
This was beautifully written. I loved the showcasing of how seemingly small moments can hit us hard as kids. I remember my dad once telling me that boys didn't button their shirts from the bottom, only girls did. He always had phrases like that. I did it because I'd sometimes get the buttons lopsided if I did it from the top, but it was always making me think of if I was doing things "wrong" as a boy. I told my dad about this decades later and he was baffled at his own comment. We don't even think about this stuff and how it impacts our psyche. But I think you carried that well. In fact, this was so beautifully done for the toxic masculinity part that the romance bits and your usual merging thing kinda felt tacked on -- not because they were bad, they were fine -- but because they didn't much hit with the same flair as the larger theme. Anyway. This wasn't really erotica, but it was amazing to me.
Dec 22, 2019
7/31/23, 8:48 PM
This one actually got my curiosity up, but ended too soon! I hope you finish it someday.
7/31/23, 8:05 PM
*fans myself* I do declare, I have the *vapors* over what you wrote. So romantic and steamy, with just enough comedy that doesn't take you out of the story being told. And I felt like I was *there*. Seriously, so good.
7/31/23, 8:03 PM
I hope Matthew gets revenge on Eddie though. Could be an interesting twist
7/31/23, 6:20 PM
such a fuckin hot series!!