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7/11/23, 12:01 AM
So, huh. Until I read the comments, I thought this was a cautionary tale (well, fake, because it's hot); what if you could change anything about yourself, and then figured out you could change _everything_ about yourself? And that power was in two peoples' hands? And the changes reflected retroactively in reality? If that was the case, then your new personality and life would reflect upon the changes you'd make, like continuously compounding interest. But all of that falls apart right at the end, where this becomes a cautionary tale of ...one man taking over another's life, by taking away their mental capacity for making their own choices. Which is so, so much darker. And it was Ethan who upped his own narcissism, wasn't it? I really feel that should have been Sam, as it would have allowed him the sociopathy to make it All About Him. And that latter "cautionary tale" is certainly right within The Twilight Zone's wheelhouse, for sure, but I was digging the repercussions for the geometric progression of Sam and Ethan's mutual changes. Okay. I've obsessed over this hot little bit of erotica a touch too much now, I think. I loved the story. But like any good TZ piece, it got me thinking.
Jul 10, 2023
Anonymous
7/10/23, 10:09 PM
Loved all of these snippets but the first and last one were my favorites. Hope to see these turn into full stories!
rodjock
7/10/23, 7:04 PM
This was hot and a good second chapter! My one point would be that it is too fast paced. You have an incredible background story and I believe adding more details and slowing the progression would improve the story, especially in climactic sections like the initial brainwashing.

7/10/23, 9:17 PM
@rodjock Yeah, that's fair. I thought about that when I was writing it, but I also really only covered the start of it. The men were all still in the chambers when Tate left, so I was trying to imply they are left there for a while. But I understand what you mean.
Jul 10, 2023
Anonymous
7/10/23, 9:07 PM
The first one with the blue spiral was my favorite. So hot. I just love resistance
Jay
7/10/23, 8:51 PM
Really liked the bitched-by-the-kid part. That's the domination aspect that's the hottest. The rest of the sex is good too, as always!
Jay
7/10/23, 8:49 PM
Loved see Sammy show off John and Eli as his bitches after what they'd done in the previous chapter. Dungeon scene with Rachel was very well done, much hotter than most bi sex! Excellent porn, but the lesson that we're happier when we can be what we are is definitely true IRL as well.
Anonymous
7/10/23, 8:43 PM
omg can’t wait for the next update I love this series
Anonymous
7/10/23, 7:01 PM
Great continuation to the story!
7/10/23, 5:56 PM
Great story. Sexy, erotic and well written.
7/10/23, 4:32 PM
¡Gran comienzo!