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6/4/23, 10:38 PM
Hi. There’s a big sub small top tag around here. This is definitely an amazing start!
5/28/23, 6:37 PM
Before I ever read a story the summery reals me in. A good story catching snip bit can really draw people in. So instead of you introducing yourself as a new writer, say something about your story and the characters in it. Your introduction can go right before the story begins inside a few (of these). That way people know it’s not about the story. That’s one way or another way is a line under your introduction to break it from the rest of the story. Here’s an example of one I did something like what I’m saying. https://www.gayspiralstories.com/story/show/10006069

6/4/23, 7:29 AM
@[Drake Nightstorm](/user/show/650184) Thank you for your feedback. I didnt realize as I was filling out the submission form that what I put there would end up as the intro displayed. I will look into adjusting it.

6/4/23, 10:37 PM
@[Bowtied boy Jason](/user/show/255330) Sure no problem! I believe that you got something here that could get more traffic.
6/4/23, 9:08 PM
Oh, this was so well done. Though I always leave these stories feeling the wronged, vengeful girls have accidentally done these assholes a huge favor.
6/4/23, 6:37 PM
Small top + big sub, a banger right here!
6/4/23, 6:36 PM
So who is this Donny, and where did he come from. What’s his backstory?
6/2/23, 9:50 PM
Great start. I love when guys just do what they are told.

thesaxcat
6/4/23, 6:23 PM
@[Clinton J](/user/show/2616233) Same!
6/2/23, 11:02 PM
Nice start! Looking forward to a story with a dominant pov guy. I hopes he's a top too.so him wanting his brother to be better is great, helpful masters are great. So yeah this was great, looking forward to more.

thesaxcat
6/4/23, 6:23 PM
@[Heru Kane](/user/show/56823) Thanks, I enjoy seeing a Master do good things for those they control in these situations.
6/4/23, 5:24 PM
The sign of a good story is when the second read is better than the first . I feel for Matt, his kindness caused him dearly. Will Master give him a second chance and better yet will Matt become the slave trainer he needs to be. As always this is your story to do as you will. As to Jake, there he will be tamed in the end, I have no doubt or won't he?
nycboot
6/4/23, 5:14 PM
A great start! I had no problem switching between 1st and 3rd person or whatever point of view you want to put us through (we are your reading slaves, right? :laughing:). Personally I also love stories where the victim is aware of what's happening and struggles (usually fruitlessless) against the power they will never conquer. Looking forward to more!
6/4/23, 3:26 PM
Love the story but one humiliation you failed to use is the permanent removal of their body hair which would make them feel like kids.