Recent Comments

6/4/23, 3:36 AM
So hot! Glad to know there's a method to his madness, and a reason for the delay!
DWK
6/4/23, 3:02 AM
Looking forward to more. Great idea.
6/4/23, 1:34 AM
Seems like a fun premise! Would be curious to see where this goes. One constructive criticism piece I would suggest is to the time skips seems a bit hard to follow, without clear indicators (either date stamps or a mention in the narrative). I'd recommend keeping thr story generally linear or adding more clarity in future chapters :)
Hank
6/4/23, 1:28 AM
Sir, your ploy, story line, & character development were spot on. Your writing superb. Love the control aspects. Frankly, I would give my eye teeth to meet and be seduced by Matt I could feel myself submitting to Matt as I read the story. Keep writing this series it is incredibly arousing and orgasmic. WBLSO@aol.com
6/4/23, 12:32 AM
Great start there @Thesaxcat. I so am ready for chapters 2 and 3. Love how you can tell the relationship and also a supportive but dominate top in the making, maybe even a power bottom that knows how to take control and make a guy him what he wants.
slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
6/3/23, 11:42 PM
Excellent start! Love horny teenagers as the Masters of fully controlled men.
6/1/23, 4:22 PM
I loved the story but it MUST continue. It is just a start. If not it will be just another good story not a memorable one, And, of course, the two main character have to unite as a team with Kenneth & Thad.

Sebastián Apollo
6/3/23, 10:59 PM
@[br6205](/user/show/10027864) Thankfully, we still have a little bit left to go. We shall see how it all turns out! :smiley:
6/3/23, 10:58 PM
great!
6/3/23, 2:00 PM
This was a hot set of sex scenes, and I’m glad Papi got to unload in Thad’s ass after all; Kenneth stealing that cumshot was positively wicked! I also understand why Papi is reconsidering—this situation was incredibly stressful, I’m sure, and no one should have to walk around with a career-destroying secret on their shoulders all the time. I appreciate that he’s seriously thinking about it.

Sebastián Apollo
6/3/23, 10:55 PM
@[Soren Fitz](/user/show/10011670) As always, thank you for the kind words Soren. It's been a tizzy trying to balance the seriousness of the situation with the sex scenes and lightheartedness of it all, so I'm glad some are enjoying all aspects of the story!
6/3/23, 9:54 PM
Personally I like it very much. I love smaller and physically weaker dominants and you described both sides, controlled and controller. To make it more consistent and easier to read, try to keep POV in the same person, I don't mean all the time Garry or whatever but either 3rd pov or 1st pov. There was a switch in-between with pov which was a little confusing but overall great job. Love the story so far and can't wait for more.