Recent Comments

Tony
5/22/23, 1:13 AM
Great story
5/21/23, 11:32 PM
New story soon?
5/21/23, 11:16 PM
More.....please, morrreeee:drooling_face:
KJP
5/21/23, 10:34 PM
Just started reading. Love it!
5/21/23, 10:13 PM
One of my fave stories in a while. This gets me hottttt. Thank you!!
Anonymous
5/21/23, 9:41 PM
Holy fuck this is hot
Anonymous
5/21/23, 8:49 PM
If anyone heard anything a minute ago, that was just the sound of my heart breaking into a million tiny pieces when Lex killed Gunnar, no big deal.

5/21/23, 9:05 PM
@Anonymous Lex is a complete asshole.
5/21/23, 5:49 PM
Tell us more about Brad. Will he become the doctor's slave, give up his ass?
5/21/23, 5:34 PM
The control over the workers is very erotic. Control is always the the biggest turn on to me. Great story
bbRyan
4/12/23, 4:23 AM
@Plymouth58 hope the next chapter is getting close! 🙂

5/18/23, 1:41 AM
@bbRyan Hello. I found the chapter 14 very complicated and terribly long even by my standars. There was a lot going on, and I made the mistake of breaking up the narrative dedicating time to T-Bone's, Chuy's, Terry's and Kyle's point of view, which made the chapter impossibly long and very slow. I like the slow pace, but I thought "no way, the readers are going to get bored with all of this." Chuy's part was especially long and departed a bit too far away from the main plot, I'm almost considering it for a separate story. I have already started to compress and discard what was not so important. It worries me that maybe some readers find the chapter slow in the end and a bit detouring of the plot, but there's an amount of reasons for the good of the story, so I'm doing my best to make it pay off well in the end.

Anonymous
5/21/23, 3:30 PM
@[Plymouth58](/user/show/1353762) sounds great! Ya, I think readers would be turned off by too long of a story and one that doesn't have a good focus. I hope there are some pay offs though throughout the story, even if it is long, for those of us that want to see Rayner further destroyed permanently. So, I hope there is a clear progression for him that he's continuing down a declining path.