Recent Comments

Swizz
5/20/23, 7:55 PM
Nice start! Very intrigued to see where this leads.
5/20/23, 2:35 PM
Like the slow burn. Almost like edging since we know the premise this story is based. Keep going.

5/20/23, 7:16 PM
@[TexMuscle](/user/show/10002223) Thank you for the support; this is a slow tempo section in the musical score that is this story. But I definitely wanted to put in the potential bond between Matthew and Eric as it will be something that comes up later in the story.
5/20/23, 7:09 PM
I can only echo what everyone else has said; you came in with a very good introduction to you and your writing. I thoroughly enjoyed it and look forward to seeing what comes next.
5/20/23, 6:46 PM
What a great start! Would’ve not have guessed this is just your first story given level of detail and slow buildup.
Anonymous
5/20/23, 6:44 PM
good story with focus on hypnosis. Let us see more
Anonymous
5/20/23, 6:34 PM
Absolutely LOVE what you’re setting up here! Really hope it’s not the last we see of Anton, Paul and Clay. But more importantly, really hope this isn’t the last we see of you as a writer :)
Nico
5/20/23, 6:29 PM
Amazing first story! I'm looking forward to more misadventures within the workplace, definitely wish I could program my employees~
5/20/23, 6:00 PM
This is a great story to make your debut with! I hope we get to see more of Clay and his new stable of obedient wage slaves haha
5/20/23, 4:54 PM
I absolutely loved the first half of this. Freddy's journey of self discovery, untangling which things were his fault and which were the rock's, and the way you could see him regaining control. Made the whole journey worth it. Uri is the antagonist, and the type of guy a lot of people know in real life and dislike, but seeing him feel inferior to a literal dildo does a great job of showing his interiority and making him sympathetic, right before he does something absolutely monstrous and selfish. He comes off as Sex obsessed, but i think that's a combination of enjoying it, bottom daze cutting his anxieties, and viewing it as the only thing people like about him. So he turns himself into the ideal bottom, hoping that earns him love. I still don't like him (which isn't necessary) but i how he can come to the same self discovery as Freddy and find happiness.
5/20/23, 4:18 PM
You need to expand this story into more chapters.