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bbRyan
4/12/23, 4:23 AM
@Plymouth58 hope the next chapter is getting close! 🙂

5/18/23, 1:41 AM
@bbRyan Hello. I found the chapter 14 very complicated and terribly long even by my standars. There was a lot going on, and I made the mistake of breaking up the narrative dedicating time to T-Bone's, Chuy's, Terry's and Kyle's point of view, which made the chapter impossibly long and very slow. I like the slow pace, but I thought "no way, the readers are going to get bored with all of this." Chuy's part was especially long and departed a bit too far away from the main plot, I'm almost considering it for a separate story. I have already started to compress and discard what was not so important. It worries me that maybe some readers find the chapter slow in the end and a bit detouring of the plot, but there's an amount of reasons for the good of the story, so I'm doing my best to make it pay off well in the end.

Anonymous
5/21/23, 3:30 PM
@[Plymouth58](/user/show/1353762) sounds great! Ya, I think readers would be turned off by too long of a story and one that doesn't have a good focus. I hope there are some pay offs though throughout the story, even if it is long, for those of us that want to see Rayner further destroyed permanently. So, I hope there is a clear progression for him that he's continuing down a declining path.
5/21/23, 2:47 PM
Hot, hilarious, compelling and well written, great character development (and a lot of good foreshadowing about Freddy's latest wish, specifically). Overall 10/10,Thank you for this series.
5/21/23, 6:56 AM
Could I suggest a "No Sex" tag for this series?

5/21/23, 1:10 PM
@[Hypnothrill](/user/show/37386) Thanks for reading my work; the tag has been added.
5/21/23, 9:26 AM
Preppy, proper, obedient transformations are a fave. Can't wait for more!
5/21/23, 9:12 AM
I thought this was a clever read. It's good to know that in '23 there is still more to this story out there.
Moe
5/21/23, 8:41 AM
Read this hours ago and I’m still thinking about it. Just absolutely fantastic work that really sticks with you. I’ve been invested in this series since the first chapter and I can’t wait to see how it concludes, keep up the great work. I don’t know if I’ve ever felt such sympathy for a character on this website as I do Freddy, so here’s hoping for a happy ending for him.
5/21/23, 7:18 AM
Great introduction. Hopefully there will be more chapters. There must be more ways Paul can learn to show Clay proper respect. Maybe he can also help some more of his coworkers find the right way.
5/21/23, 7:13 AM
Great start! I can't wait to see what Clay's second set of suggestions for Paul and Anton will be!
5/21/23, 6:05 AM
Wow. The master at work. Got so excited to see this series had a new chapter and this was totally stellar. Super hot use of the mind control kink, braided beautifully with a kind of heartbreaking crash into reality for Freddy. We also got a peek into why Uri is the way he is. I laughed, I cried, I got hard. Thanks for sharing your talents with us.
Martin
5/20/23, 10:52 PM
I'm devastated. Now I really know how much class and depth a mind-control smut story can have. I'll never even be able to come into the same ballpark, much less hope to write anything that could stand its ground next to a story like this. I'll never write another story unless you promise to get down to the level of us mortal authors!

5/21/23, 3:24 AM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) I feel this too. Very much.