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5/3/23, 8:16 PM
I love this story. I love drones. I love rubber. I love mind control. I’m getting mad cyberman vibes (my favourite’monsters’ from doctor who) where Todd is the sexy, kinky, sadistic cybercontroller

5/3/23, 8:47 PM
@[SlaveBoyJG](/user/show/10017787) The story is loosely based on the "Rise of the Cybermen / Age of Steel" 2 parter lol. Glad you're enjoying!

5/3/23, 8:52 PM
@[Kyle Cage](/user/show/1756274) OMG! I knew it! That has two be my favourite two-parter. Loving it!

5/3/23, 9:10 PM
@[SlaveBoyJG](/user/show/10017787) Of course, there's no doctor to save the day this time hehe.

5/3/23, 9:42 PM
@[Kyle Cage](/user/show/1756274) I was more of a Matt Smith Stan anyways…hehe. I’m so hyped to read the ending to this. Incredible storytelling, mate!
5/3/23, 7:35 PM
So... Now that there's a writers strike, any chance this "reality series" might come back to fill the void? (wink, wink)
Kipper
5/3/23, 6:58 PM
You are correct. This chapter is nearly impossible to read, and it's not just the voice to text. Luke appears in a room he never entered, which has two men, no three men. Some sentences seem out of order, and suddenly there are horseshoes! We can't tell whose nipples are whose. Was there actually an outline? There are several disconnects. It seemed like a good idea, but I agree the pacing is off, and it's difficult to determine what is going on. UPS. Man. Yes, That's where we've suddenly landed with no reference. Maybe. It got worse when he presumably arrived at Jack's home. Why publish a first draft that obviously needs a proofreader and an editor?
Anonymous
5/3/23, 6:53 PM
I would be nice to have the context But instead oh having the classic situation that the victim is unaware of the changes He has totally free will and still wanting to be his daddy's fuck toy
5/3/23, 4:32 PM
Goldilocks & the Three Bears. It practically writes itself. :)
5/3/23, 1:32 AM
Was kinda hoping this was planned by the company and he would have been picked up and caged / collected like a total goonmonkey.

5/3/23, 4:23 PM
@[Jamiemboy](/user/show/10005561) Exactly. Maybe after collecting him they use him to test other versions of their formula. Who knows what could happen?
Elm
5/3/23, 4:14 PM
Another one of my favorite haha, Soo good!
5/3/23, 3:49 PM
Awesome world you’ve created.
5/3/23, 3:15 PM
Okay,WOW. This gets interesting, I wanna see how this goes
5/3/23, 2:25 PM
No worries Can be hard to breaking writers block. Just do your best Is always nice to see new xharacters. Especially a beefcake to take command over Sanjay <3 And never say no to a hypno scene