Recent Comments

4/19/23, 9:10 PM
Great to read a new series from you! It's great to see another story with altered reality and jumping into downright debauchery in "totally normal" plain sight settings. I quite enjoyed Totally Normal Cafe previously, gradually sinking into uninhibited depravity but yet the controllers still maintain a level of moral conscience and struggle. It gives an understanding that they are still real humans, not just pure sex machines. This time around you seem to jump more right into the corrupted mindset, but still I see that there would still be some personal intimacies and internal struggles in between the power. Looking forward to see how "normal" and "professional" this office will become!

benedick543
4/20/23, 5:17 AM
@[tomozco](/user/show/13902) thank you! I think I really want to highlight those parts because, honestly, if we had the same power in real life, it would be really easy to be consumed by all the possibilities. Giving the controllers more nuance with their moral compass, for me, makes the story more believable and grounded. Glad you liked my approach!
4/19/23, 7:57 PM
When I read the part about the new salad dressing and food seasoning, I couldn't help but remember what I did with a submissive of mine: I hypnotically programmed him to, at dinnertime, become inexplicably very excited and start masturbating, until cum over your food. After spilling his seed over the food, without any memory of the fact, he would sit down and eat normally until the last mouthful, only after that would "the scales" fall from his eyes and he would remember everything, he even ate semen with his food, hahahahahaha

benedick543
4/20/23, 5:14 AM
@[Hypno Brazil](/user/show/10015263) sounds hot! haha
Doopboopdoop
4/20/23, 4:18 AM
It's great to see a LitRPG GSS story, something I've been hoping to come across for a while now. I'm excited to see where the story goes!
Nov 2, 2022
4/20/23, 3:28 AM
My dick was really hard while reading this, Please give us a few more chapters, I wanna know how peter continues to hypnotise and dominate mark and take him as his sex slave! I wonder if this will become a case of ..... BE CAREFUL WHAT YOU WISH FOR!!!
4/20/23, 3:07 AM
This was really hot. I love how Jerod got his revenge on one of his bully's. Can't wait to read more.
4/20/23, 2:36 AM
Just did a full read of all the chapters to this point. All I can say is. Very hot idea with the spandex taking control of people. Now I can't wait for the next chapter.
Willie Cici
4/20/23, 1:22 AM
I liked it. Good first effort. Keep it up!
4/19/23, 11:58 PM
Is there more? Please be more
4/15/23, 9:05 AM
Congratulations. And thank you. This was an incredible ride and the most creative use of branching paths I've ever seen. To have each path be part of the major story and end result was very clever. Lots of hot sex with a variety of types. Incubus and Gerri definitely win from me. Gerri's comment about just wanting Xavier to be happy melted my little heart. I also love that you had some romance in here and that it ended with a poly finale so everyone can share the love.

4/19/23, 11:45 PM
@[Evan Jackson](/user/show/133763) I'm so glad you liked it — thank you for your incredibly generous comments! I had a lot of fun coming up with the 'branching' premise and the way it would ripple out and affect all the Xaviers at once, and I'm really glad it's been working for readers. 😄 Thank you!
4/19/23, 9:42 PM
I'm really enjoying this series, but as the cast grows, it's getting harder to keep track of everybody. We have to know their name, their color, and what they represent -- that's three ID's per character, multiplied by eight... it's a lot! You've done a good job of keeping everybody straight (pardon the pun), but I wonder if you could help the reader out a little more, refer to their name and their color, or their spandex ID. It gets a little confusing when you just use their frat name. Example, I know there's a Dustin, but I had to scroll up and look at the chart to know he was Statue, and that's gold, right? Honestly, this story is a lot of fun -- I'm really enjoying it -- and my comments are meant to be helpful.