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4/4/23, 7:47 AM
I want red hood too
4/4/23, 5:49 AM
This was sensational.
4/3/23, 9:12 AM
Great story, enjoyed Dom's struggle with his new powers. It would be fun to explore his new relationship with Brian, since he can't stand him but has great sex with him.

Ash
4/4/23, 5:49 AM
@[mystrangetfs](/user/show/198116) I think his relationship with Brian will be my favorite to write about. Anyone can write about a bff turned lover, but rivals/enemies to lover? Amazing. Add on the fact that it’s one-sided? Chef’s kiss.
4/1/23, 11:47 AM
Very good job! I kept thinking to myself that I'd love to see more of Dom and this universe - good job getting an odd dream down and turning it into such a hot story! I hope to see more soon!

Ash
4/4/23, 5:45 AM
@[Dace](/user/show/1217645) Yea, the crazy thing was that this whole world came about just because of one dream. I don’t even remember the dream anymore. Just that it had the concept of this story.
Ash
4/4/23, 5:35 AM
Absolutely amazing climax (both literary and physically) to a fantastic series. Can’t wait to read what happens next! You are an amazing writer with great ideas. This series is exactly the kind of story I was looking for when I first got on this site. I definitely agree that there aren’t enough dumb jock stories on this site, which is why I started writing my own stories here. And thank you so much for the shoutout! I’ll have to dedicate a future chapter of SEXTREME just for you! May I suggest a double penetration scene and/or an accidental sex scene in public (either hidden or caught). Maybe Theo can take his jock(s) on a trip where they get “stuck” again? Maybe a visit to a certain gym? :wink:
3/10/23, 10:51 PM
I really enjoyed the detail and worldbuilding you put into this, and the twists and turns throughout this story were marvellous! Thanks for adding this to the contest; I'm glad to have read it.

4/3/23, 8:25 PM
@[Soren Fitz](/user/show/10011670) Thank you for the comments, I wish I could say I planned everything from the start but the twists seemed to generate themselves as I went along - Gideon wasn't even named until near the end and was not intended to make William a decoy protagonist. Truthfully I couldn't write a convincing demon and things spiralled from that. If someone enjoyed it then I can say it was a worthwhile endeavour and it has given me more confidence to try and finish laying out my other ideas. I have the utmost respect for authors such as youself, who can not only come up with a great concept, but to polish it into a finished form for the consumption of others.

4/4/23, 4:50 AM
@[Envious George](/user/show/10012614) Let me tell you a secret: most writers work that way. I know I do too. You have a vague idea of what you want to do but the whole story doesn’t even begin to coalesce until you start writing it, and then crazy shit just starts falling out of the sky and into your story. The way to improve your craft isn’t to “have the whole idea fleshed out from the start,” but to be able to roll with the punches and later on, take what you discover and propagate that *back* into what you wrote before you discovered the twist. That’s how I take my concepts and polish them up. I really appreciate the compliment! But it’s nothing insanely special, it’s just the repeated honing and honing of this process where you discover your story in the midst of writing it, and then go back and plant that story into what you’ve already written. They call it ‘pantsing’. I believe in you!
4/4/23, 3:58 AM
I would like to say that I was hoping that this would happen! I like it when the ‘good’ side is still ends up with sex and maybe a little sprinkling of mind control! I can’t fully articulate it, but I just think that with corruption comes with this notion that being gay itself is corrupt. You get the straight man and make him the gay slut it’s like heck yes being gay is sinful and I get that sometimes because society at large likes to view gay people as damned that it can be easier to just “embrace it and own it, Queen!” Mind you, I have read so many corruption stories just because of the mind control and the sex but I always feel a little sad when the ending is “and now the man is corrupted to be gay _and_ evil!” Not to turn anybody down, this chapter simply surprised me, made me tear up just a little. I am from the Philippines, and you still see openly queer people with the makeup and acrylics and the extensions attending Sunday service. Sure, many people tolerate but not outright and ferociously support the LGBT but nobody condemns us for practicing religion openly. So this idea that God outright ordered us to hate gay people doesn’t sink in as much to some people. Our most openly queer media personalities still talk about how strong faith help them where they are. So, works like this, though rare, where maybe the ‘good’ side is just as queer and kinky, makes me excited and giddy and happy! This refocus on “Love” and how sex ought to be an expression of love and passion and not something imposed externally by a corrupting factor but instead should we willed strikes a cord in me. I like how you make the distinction with how Tanner is manipulating and warping, forcing essentially, everybody for HIS own gain, while the Cat’s focus is more on how everybody can be a bit more cognizant and really enjoy the entirety of this expression of love. So, to keep it brief, I am rooting for Blake and the Cat!
May 1, 2016
Jack
4/4/23, 2:26 AM
Just a shame we haven't seen a continuation of this story. It really is fantastic.

Nutiper
4/4/23, 3:56 AM
@[Jack](/user/show/915335) I agree! It's among my old favorites, and it has visibly inspired other stories on this site. I know it says at the top of story that it was commissioned and paid for — and I've wondered more than once if MCBrain would accept a commission that was just "write more chapters of this please!" haha. Plus the dynamic of Milo noticing the changes (and the open ending) always made me wonder what a continuation would be like.
dmc
4/4/23, 1:44 AM
Hot, awesome start
Anonymous
4/4/23, 1:35 AM
Who is Richard?