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3/10/23, 10:51 PM
I really enjoyed the detail and worldbuilding you put into this, and the twists and turns throughout this story were marvellous! Thanks for adding this to the contest; I'm glad to have read it.

4/3/23, 8:25 PM
@[Soren Fitz](/user/show/10011670) Thank you for the comments, I wish I could say I planned everything from the start but the twists seemed to generate themselves as I went along - Gideon wasn't even named until near the end and was not intended to make William a decoy protagonist. Truthfully I couldn't write a convincing demon and things spiralled from that. If someone enjoyed it then I can say it was a worthwhile endeavour and it has given me more confidence to try and finish laying out my other ideas. I have the utmost respect for authors such as youself, who can not only come up with a great concept, but to polish it into a finished form for the consumption of others.

4/4/23, 4:50 AM
@[Envious George](/user/show/10012614) Let me tell you a secret: most writers work that way. I know I do too. You have a vague idea of what you want to do but the whole story doesn’t even begin to coalesce until you start writing it, and then crazy shit just starts falling out of the sky and into your story. The way to improve your craft isn’t to “have the whole idea fleshed out from the start,” but to be able to roll with the punches and later on, take what you discover and propagate that *back* into what you wrote before you discovered the twist. That’s how I take my concepts and polish them up. I really appreciate the compliment! But it’s nothing insanely special, it’s just the repeated honing and honing of this process where you discover your story in the midst of writing it, and then go back and plant that story into what you’ve already written. They call it ‘pantsing’. I believe in you!
4/4/23, 3:58 AM
I would like to say that I was hoping that this would happen! I like it when the ‘good’ side is still ends up with sex and maybe a little sprinkling of mind control! I can’t fully articulate it, but I just think that with corruption comes with this notion that being gay itself is corrupt. You get the straight man and make him the gay slut it’s like heck yes being gay is sinful and I get that sometimes because society at large likes to view gay people as damned that it can be easier to just “embrace it and own it, Queen!” Mind you, I have read so many corruption stories just because of the mind control and the sex but I always feel a little sad when the ending is “and now the man is corrupted to be gay _and_ evil!” Not to turn anybody down, this chapter simply surprised me, made me tear up just a little. I am from the Philippines, and you still see openly queer people with the makeup and acrylics and the extensions attending Sunday service. Sure, many people tolerate but not outright and ferociously support the LGBT but nobody condemns us for practicing religion openly. So this idea that God outright ordered us to hate gay people doesn’t sink in as much to some people. Our most openly queer media personalities still talk about how strong faith help them where they are. So, works like this, though rare, where maybe the ‘good’ side is just as queer and kinky, makes me excited and giddy and happy! This refocus on “Love” and how sex ought to be an expression of love and passion and not something imposed externally by a corrupting factor but instead should we willed strikes a cord in me. I like how you make the distinction with how Tanner is manipulating and warping, forcing essentially, everybody for HIS own gain, while the Cat’s focus is more on how everybody can be a bit more cognizant and really enjoy the entirety of this expression of love. So, to keep it brief, I am rooting for Blake and the Cat!
May 1, 2016
Jack
4/4/23, 2:26 AM
Just a shame we haven't seen a continuation of this story. It really is fantastic.

Nutiper
4/4/23, 3:56 AM
@[Jack](/user/show/915335) I agree! It's among my old favorites, and it has visibly inspired other stories on this site. I know it says at the top of story that it was commissioned and paid for — and I've wondered more than once if MCBrain would accept a commission that was just "write more chapters of this please!" haha. Plus the dynamic of Milo noticing the changes (and the open ending) always made me wonder what a continuation would be like.
dmc
4/4/23, 1:44 AM
Hot, awesome start
Anonymous
4/4/23, 1:35 AM
Who is Richard?
M_S
4/3/23, 7:50 PM
I'm aware you mean this story directly as presented, but I can't help but keep reading it with the context of 'what if they're not dumb, and just amusing themselves with it as a cover, while the MC's ....enthusiasm....is something they're controlling him into having.', y'know, the 'control the person who thinks they're in control' trope. Mainly because -wow- the level of dumb. But thanks for writing!

4/4/23, 1:29 AM
@[M_S](/user/show/2659890) Haha I had that thought too. Like what if they're both just RPing with the bottom. I mean what if it's all a set up? It's just good fun ridiculous hyper fucking.
Anonymous
3/7/23, 8:41 PM
Even after all these years I reread this series frequently. Really hope there'll be a continuation someday!

3/28/23, 6:44 PM
@Anonymous Not gonna lie, was just talking with Swizz about continuing this…I definitely need to.

Anonymous
3/30/23, 2:12 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) GRANTS FAM

3/30/23, 4:18 AM
@Anonymous Grant’s dad…Tim…Tim’s dad…Grants brothers. Paul needs his retirement plan to come to fruition. 😈

Anonymous
3/31/23, 12:50 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) OMG YES

pmk
3/31/23, 2:44 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) Yes! It would be amazing to see the story completed and see what happens with Grant and Tim!

4/1/23, 6:25 PM
@[pmk](/user/show/976276) I’ve just got a lot of stories I’m partway through lol. Next chapter of Joey, some stuff with Swizz, a story Swizz is writing that I’m helping him with, some of Robin’s partly completed works, AND a likely 12-15 chapter epic I’m in the middle of chapter 6. I’ve got so much mind control porn in my brain!!

Anonymous
4/2/23, 5:34 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) Joey is the fan fav

Vince
4/3/23, 11:02 PM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) Do you have a plan to release the epic if parts are done or waiting to finish?

4/3/23, 11:24 PM
@Vince I’ve learned from my mistakes. I have unfinished stories that are years waiting for continuation. So I’m getting it all done first lol. It takes place over one week, but big changes each day. So some days are multiple chapters. Starts on a Monday…I’m on Wednesday now lol

Anonymous
4/4/23, 12:02 AM
@[EdIam](/user/show/17145) Love that
4/4/23, 12:01 AM
This was really well done. You really captured the desperation and lack of control of Josh as the candy took effect. And even developing an addition to the candy. His lack of cumming is interesting while still orgasming and satisfying and ending the horny effect.
4/3/23, 10:58 PM
It's been so long since you've updated that it seems like you'll never be back, but this is absolutely one of my favorite stories on the site. If you see this, know that you're still making new fans and someone out there would love to read a new chapter!
4/3/23, 10:26 PM
Loved this! Hope a continuation is planned