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4/2/23, 5:06 AM
Like the other commenters I was all ready to see how this tale ended and then vote you Emperor of the Contest. Well, even without that, this is a superb story - hot, sweet, funny, original, delightful in its big strokes and its tiny details! Clearly this is not your first...read-eo...and whenever we get to find out who you are I'll be searching for all your other read-eos, even if they are friggin' accounting textbooks. You, Sir, are a Writer! I'll be standing outside your virtual window cheering each additional chapter!
4/2/23, 4:44 AM
Great first chapter. Can’t wait to see what the other candies do.
3/21/23, 12:24 PM
I found this story really hot and a brilliant use of the story branching concept. I do prefer less wholesome endings though. I'd love an alternate ending where the guy's expectation of a boyfriend is changed such that they're all okay just treating Xavier like a cumdump piece of meat. Something like "Anyone who fucks a slut likes seeing them dominated by other tops and will make sure the only thing the slut has to think about is pleasing cock with their holes." I like protagonists getting their lives ruined in nasty ways haha what can I say?

3/22/23, 4:50 AM
@[Dreamweavr](/user/show/883922) Wow, I really appreciate the compliment! 😄 I had fun with the branching aspect... And you know, I definitely enjoy reading bad endings sometimes, but I kinda suck at writing them. I don't think I'd be able to work one into the current story, alas. But if someone else wrote one and posted it, I'd definitely be intrigued and would read it...

3/22/23, 9:44 AM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) I may do that then ;)

3/23/23, 7:04 PM
@[Dreamweavr](/user/show/883922) And I'll be very excited to read it if you do... 👀

3/29/23, 5:26 PM
@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) You have enough material that it's practically a twine-based erotic interactive game, it's just that you _would_ need to let people have those bad endings. (And of course adding some art of the key scenes would be nice, but there are interactive non-visual novels on itch.io.) The thing is, you had so many delicious bad endings set up and then you just teleported the POV character away and canceled out every consequence in this final chapter. All you would need to do to write those bad endings is let the consequences you already described happen. Something along the lines of, character feels himself drawn back towards his other self but resists and submits to his transformation into an incubus/toy of an elder God/begs Zeus to actually breed him and let him bear a god baby/becomes the plaything of the regular guys etcetera. Maybe try writing a couple bad endings as practice, because if you don't try you're not going to improve.

Anonymous
3/29/23, 8:31 PM
@[Nocturne13](/user/show/263497) I don’t know if I like the framing of “if you don’t try you’re not going to improve.” If you enjoy bad endings that’s one thing, but it seems pretty clear to me that that wasn’t what the author was going for, nor were they trying to write a traditional “choose your own adventure” story/game. From the very beginning we’re told the “branches” aren’t even branches — they’re all happening simultaneously, in every branch, as a result of the Auntie Woddin tattoo fighting for dominance with the slut seal. Having ANY route end in a full, final, game-like way wouldn’t work that well with the structure of the story. So, I don’t know, if someone writes some slut brand fanfic with “bad endings” I’d probably read it, but a story’s ending not working for you doesn’t mean it failed, or that the author needs to “improve” or is incapable of writing bad endings. Maybe they just didn’t want to, and having a different taste in smut or storytelling is, imo, perfectly fine

3/30/23, 2:35 PM
@Anonymous Yes, I know this probably wasn't directed toward me, but I totally like and respect the authors choices here and wasn't trying to suggest they _(should have)_ done anything differently. In fact using this format for something that specifically is NOT a choose your own adventure I really liked. Just that my tastes lean toward less wholesome endings.

4/2/23, 4:11 AM
@[Dreamweavr](/user/show/883922) Yes, no worries, I understood completely! 😊 And thank you for your kind words! It's high praise to hear that you enjoyed this story so much that it left you wanting more, and thinking of alternative scenarios! I like your writing a lot, too, so seeing your spin on things would be very neat to me. 

@Anonymous Thank you for articulating this better than I could have. 😅 I appreciate it! 

@Nocturne Truthfully, self-deprecating comments aside, I don't really have much trouble writing bad endings... I didn't do bad endings here because I could see it wasn't right for the story I wanted to tell. Me adding them into the story would feel awkward and forced to me, and would get in the way of the larger story structure I was interested in building. However: I'm always thrilled when another author says that something I wrote got their imagination spinning! Like I said to Dreamweavr, I'm flattered he even considered doing his own take on things. (No pressure to actually follow through, of course, Dreamweavr! Just saying I appreciate the sentiment.)
4/2/23, 4:02 AM
Finally a good and hot story about men of color as Bottoms. Middle Eastern men are just the best, I hope you write more about them in your next stories.
AgentRascal
4/2/23, 3:08 AM
Kinda wonder if since Rich is a kinky fuck, he'll encourage Merlin to let him stay dirty and get smegy 🐽🥵🤤
jay
4/2/23, 2:25 AM
Looking for more content. Very interesting. i will be interested to hear what the doctor has to say.
4/1/23, 10:31 PM
JUst FUN! SO MUCH FUN!
4/1/23, 7:59 PM
Very hot episode! I think I see where each guy is headed. Great work!

4/1/23, 8:00 PM
@[Cutlerfan](/user/show/14171) Thanks! I am sure it might be a bit obvious at this point.
4/1/23, 7:21 PM
Hot damn, I didn’t expect this. I love how Rich now “remembers “ Jackson, even though he’s kinda mean to him. But the jerk deserves it, I guess. Now the timer of 72 hours. Somehow, particularly with Rich’s last comment, I sense Rich will really end up Merlin’s Dick. Might not be so bad if ya get to make use of Jackson’s talents.