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Anonymous
5/23/20, 4:43 PM
**I agree with the first comment - there should be H LL to pay for Mark! I'd love to see a story where Mark gets all arrogant and careless... and *ZING: Shrinky dinks!

easdf
3/30/23, 2:22 PM
@Anonymous Actually, this could be a very interesting story. I second this idea
3/30/23, 1:48 PM
The intertwining approach of past and current is so fucked up but it works. Like talking about your childhood while having sex kind of fucked up, but it does justify(?) coach's thought process. And that he thought Luke would be his son in law... awww. One thing though, I did not expect Coach to be such a level-headed and coherent person. He's also a lot younger than I expect, in the way he speak (read: the way this chapter is written), but it also feel distinct from Luke's (read: previous chapters), which is drown in clueless-ness and lust. Might just be stereotyping, but when I think of coaches (or any father figure) the first thing that comes to mind is "incapablility of articulating thoughts in the way they think should be expressed". Maybe bc he's a single father? Or maybe he's just not a stereotype. Kinda refreshing, but also make me feel guilty of thinking of him that way.

3/30/23, 1:55 PM
@[CieL](/user/show/748750) Thanks for the comment! Yeah Coach is in his late 30s, so he’s not as old as people might think. My characterization of him is that’s he’s not a stoic man’s man, probably because of his daughters, but he’s also weary and beaten down from being a single dad. If you read my spin off Rookie Mistake you’ll get more insight into Coach. I wonder if I wrote him too young sounding, even though technically I am closer to his age than Luke’s.
3/30/23, 12:57 PM
This was incredibly well written. I would very much like to read another chapter this. I also think you have set yourself up with some very unique and creative ways this could go. Since you mentioned that it's his bodily fluids that cause people to become interested, and there are more than bodily fluids then cum. ;-)
3/30/23, 12:21 PM
Promising start!
3/30/23, 12:02 PM
Always great to see a new chapter. Things are really heating up now. Nice reveal that the fight was never really between the families having sex or not but rather abuse and care. It is a bit sad that the uptight religious values that Peter has been struggling to uphold does not seem to have any actual relevans with the powers "upstairs". I do wonder how kinky this love based sex is allowed to be. Is it monogami? Will Peters new online friends get to see them have sex on the webcam? Spying on him in the shower was use and abuse but if they both agree to it, then a webcam show might still be in the cards and could teach the other men about the difference between lust and love. Perhaps the guys have already gotten a show if Peter has already managed to put a camera up in Blakes room. I can't wait to read the conclusion.
3/30/23, 7:33 AM
Love this entire concept, hypnosis and personality along with physical changes are my favorite. Would be fun if “Francis” got some actual cosmetic procedures of his own and switched jobs for a fresh start with a new face lol
3/30/23, 6:57 AM
Super cute! Cannot wait to see where and how this plays out.
3/29/23, 10:27 PM
Definitely keep this going! And Dom doesn’t need to just 180° into being into men right away too. I’m sure that will be a struggle for a while.

Ash
3/30/23, 6:21 AM
@[Chadwoodtales](/user/show/10022598) Oh I definitely plan to make Dom’s preferences change over time. And he’s gonna fight it the entire time.
3/30/23, 6:19 AM
I liked it! Would love to see where this story goes :)
3/29/23, 6:29 PM
This was very hot and VERY well written, one of the best new stories that I’ve read in a while. If you decide to continue this story in a part 2, or more, I do like the idea of Dom finding a way of putting the whole football team under his control (once he has time to process and get over the fact that he’s now into men). Also, would like to see how a romantic relationship between Brian, Tom, and Max would play out; especially with Max, I feel an emotional confession scene is due after that little truth bomb Bibi dropped.

Ash
3/30/23, 6:16 AM
@[hypcurious](/user/show/38862) Thank you so much for the compliment. Based on the feedback so far, I’m definitely gonna make a part 2. I’ll definitely see what I can do about your ideas. I also want to see how a relationship would work out, especially since the side on the receiving end doesn’t even want it (yet?).