Recent Comments

3/28/23, 4:35 PM
...this doesn't make sense. I'm reading a story that includes some of the dirtiest, most explicit sexual content I've ever read...and I'm _tearing up_. :p But seriously, this is truly incredible! Thank GOD you kept the flashbacks to Luke's childhood; the contrast between Coach gently taking care of Luke in the past to absolutely blowing his back out in the present was a work of genius (T.S. Eliot called that a "zeugma"--the "yoking" of two contrasting ideas). But it's also super-important because it absolutely explains WHY Coach is doing what he's doing. In the previous incarnation (which ended before we reached this chapter), the Coach's desire for Luke was almost too sexually-driven. Here, we see that what he does is ultimately an act of love and compassion--and not in a creepy "let's justify this sexual assault" way that many writers fall into, but a sense of genuine care for the kid. Your indications of consent and Luke being of age are also crucial to making the story work. Thank you for a truly incredible story. :)

3/28/23, 10:41 PM
@[Feed Your Head](/user/show/1170832) Thanks for the thoughtful comment. Yeah, it was really important for me to portray Coach as helping Luke, giving Luke what he needs, and not from any selfish lustful desires that he has. Love and compassion is the way to put it. TBH stories where coaches/teachers have sex with students make me very uncomfortable. So I really tried to create the right cocktail of circumstances for why it would be OK. I know I know it's just a silly porn story, but there is a certain ick factor for me. Glad you enjoyed the flashbacks, I'm happy that I kept them in too.
3/28/23, 10:03 PM
I really hope you continue with this story.
Martin
3/28/23, 9:00 PM
I loved that! Nothing better than a loving BDSM story... You should have x-posted to cupid, so I could add some hearts to your rating, too :)

Throne
3/28/23, 9:51 PM
@[Martin](/user/show/125990) I'm so glad you liked it. When I started to write, I didn't know the story would end that way. Thanks for the suggestion.
3/28/23, 8:56 PM
please please continue this!
3/28/23, 7:40 PM
Very interesting piece of work. I guess that if it were to continue we'd have to jump up in time and see Mowgli and the kids as young adults, but it would be interesting to see how the mind control changes and grows as the children age and become adults.
3/28/23, 7:20 PM
This was extremely well written and erotic AF! Please continue this series!
3/28/23, 7:12 PM
This was delightful - hypnosis and conditioning at a gym is a classic for a reason, and this handled it well. I really loved the scene where they were admiring Trent's muscles and he's just standing there stripping for them (and then forgetting afterwards). That was delightful. Definitely looking forward to reading more from you - either in this universe or in a new story!
3/28/23, 6:09 PM
Am I sick for thinking that the janitor thing actually happend and he's subconsciously suppressing it to the point he's reliving it as dreams? Esp. with the panic episode and all that. (I know that's not the case, per your reply, but that's what I thought after reading the woke up yelling from a nightmare situation) Idk, that'd be both hot, traumatic, and would drive the story to a completely different spiral where he eventually confront the janitor again, and depending on if he has emotional support (coach & sammy etc.), wreck him. (Headcanon) I'm sick.

3/28/23, 6:31 PM
@[CieL](/user/show/748750) That’s a hot scenario, but yeah, not what I’m going for. I think I kinda messed up writing the dream. It’s not supposed to be scary; it’s supposed to be erotic and hot, leaning into a bit of degradation kink, contrasting the slovenly janitor with the clean cut jock. I don’t think Luke is even afraid, since he could easily fight the janitor off. I’ll have to give it another pass through.
Jack
3/28/23, 6:14 PM
Yes! More more more more more!
3/28/23, 5:45 PM
Mooooore ❤️