@[MonsterMash62](/user/show/3332) Thank you for the kind words! I knew the premise of "magical book" was a bit of a trope, but I thought that the dynamics between the three brothers and their interactions would make it stand out - good to see that people enjoyed it. The idea of the cop scene was actually something I've been sitting on for a quite a good while now. I originally had it plotted down in my notes as a standalone story, but I could never really find enough "meat" to make it it's own thing. So when I saw an opportunity while writing this story to include it, I did so. If you'd like to share, I'd love to know which parts or segments of the story you keep rereading. Maybe it would help me know what people like so I can include or elaborate more on it in future stories,

@The Author (name hidden due to challenge) I don’t think it’s shocking for anyone who has read my comments, but huge penises and muscles do it for me. So the first workout scene where Joaquin slips out of his shorts and cock slaps Marcos with his huge cock is really hot. Joaquin being huge to begin with is hot by itself, but the big bulge and cock slap scene really does it. Especially with how curious about J’s big dick Marcos is. Then, Joaquin fucking the woman who is not his girlfriend for hours and keeping Marcos awake, is really hot. Joaquin is such a stud that he has multiple women eager to sleep with him, and then he fucks them for hours and hours and that turns Marcos on, picturing it and listening. That is super hot. Marcos making his wishes and getting his super big dick and then showing it to Joaquin is super hot. Marcos becoming a huge muscle stud is super hot. And then the scene with the cop is insanely hot. The cop is mega hot, but him getting fucked by Marcos is really really hot. I hope it’s ok, but I’m going to mention things that personally would’ve made the story even hotter for me. I love the story, found it extremely hot and loved the dynamics between the characters. That’s all fantastic, and like I said, I’ve already revisited the scenes I mentioned above. So none of what I’m mentioning below is meant to say that I didn’t love the story. I really am just mentioning things that would’ve made the story even hotter - to me. Everyone has their own tastes and mine are different from others. I would say above everything else: write what you want and what you like and what turns you on. So please ignore anything I say here that doesn’t jive with how you write and what you like. For me, Marcos making a wish to be irresistible to guys he’s attracted to would’ve made the cop stuff even better. The cop wanting to be fucked felt a little unrealistically lucky. If Marcos had been irresistible from the magic, that would have kept me in that scene even more. Marcos and Joaquin not taking off their shirts and noticing how much eye fucking they were getting when walking around LA felt like a miss to me. I wanted to experience Marcos experiencing his new muscles more. And having Oscar notice how much attention they were both getting would’ve set him up a bit more later. In fact, Oscar and Joaquin being turned on by Marcos’s irresistible wish and Joaquin knowing what was going on would’ve been hot, and led into the ending where Oscar makes them both get fucked by him, even better. Marcos had his first fuck ever with his new cock and new muscles with the cop. Him feeling that, being more excited about his new body, and noticing every little detail, and maybe even comparing himself, to the cop more, would have made that even hotter for me. We don’t hear any mention of the cop’s dick even, which I would’ve loved to see. The cop talking about how tough it is to find a big dicked top, especially one as ripped as Marcos, would’ve boosted Marcos’s ego more and made that hotter. Again, for me. The ending, with Oscar, should’ve been incredibly hot to me. And the idea is, and the way things end is, but in between the reveal of muscled up Oscar and him no longer being a virgin and the older brothers loving how things end, it’s really rapey. That really took me out of it. Joaquin and Marcos hadn’t been evil enough, and deserving enough, in my mind, so that I didn’t feel sympathetic about them getting fucked against their will by Oscar’s huge dick. I know everything written on this site is effectively rape. It’s not that. It’s that it feels like rape. That took me right out of that scene. If one of Oscar’s wishes had been to make the two want to get fucked by him, and the struggle had been to get to the book and cross things out before Oscar stopped being a virgin, would have added a lot of tension and wouldn’t have felt as uncomfortable - again, to me. Not saying what you wrote was wrong or bad. That part didn’t work for me. I’m sure it worked for many others and if it worked for you, then that’s fine. Ok, my callouts about what would’ve made things hotter for me over. Please please please don’t only take those ideas out of what I’ve said. Remember: 1) I loved the story and praised it upfront 2) I keep revisiting it the day after finishing it, so I obviously love the scenes I loved and the story as a whole and 3) if I didn’t like the story, I wouldn’t have bothered writing this massive huge comment lol. Thank you tons for posting this story and I’m excited to see who you are after the challenge is done, and I’m looking forward to reading more from you.

@[MonsterMash62](/user/show/3332) Thank you for the detailed comment, I appreciate it! Yeah, I love the buildup before the actual sex scene myself. So the scenes of Joaquin in tight lil' shorts and the casual sexuality of the brothers really is up my alley and something I like to focus on. Glad to hear all that came through to the reader. The idea of the cop wanting to get fucked as being "unrealistically lucky" is _kinda_ the point. I talk about the idea of "porn logic" from time to time, and I definitely love the suspension of disbelief and the idea of fucking your way out of situations, so I was definitely playing into that idea. I do _**really**_ love the idea of having Marcos wish himself as being irresistible to men and I'm kicking myself realizing the lost potential, especially having Joaquin/Oscar struggle with their newfound lust for their older brother - it would've been a lot of fun to write! In regards to the brothers and not/feeling bad for what happened to them - it's a hard line to walk between giving someone negative characteristics and making them unlikable. I didn't want to make Marcos/Joaquin distasteful, but they also weren't "good" guys either. Throughout the story, I tried to make two things clear in regards to Oscar - 1) He was the odd one out - in regards to being both the youngest and being the Momma's Boy. And 2) He always knew more than he was letting on. So hopefully all those aspects of the relationship between the brothers led to a satisfying climax. _(Heh, see what I did there?)_ Please don't apologize for your critiques, I really do appreciate it and the time it must've taken to write it all out. When the mask is taken off, so to speak, feel free to reach out if you ever want to talk or give some thoughts about any of my other works.

@[amul](/user/show/10003734) Thanks for the feedback! I have zero military knowledge 😅 This piece was entirely spontaneous, but I’ll probably look it up for future reference. Who knows when it might come in handy, right?