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3/10/23, 4:22 PM
A wonderful sweet sexy story. A pleasure to read.
hypnoslut
3/10/23, 4:03 PM
I gotta go with option 1, if he’s lucky somebody else will walk in on them and more fun times will happen.
3/10/23, 3:43 PM
This is simply incredible! I love your work, but this is one of the best from you so far. The forced foot worship is a deliciously wicked idea. I'd be delighted if you ever felt like revisiting the idea of the Justice Park with other lucky protagonists. That seems like a dream job, tbh 😁

3/10/23, 3:50 PM
@[Jet313](/user/show/10009595) Thank you so much! I really appreciated this comment. I'm sure those "protagonists" won't find themselves so lucky 😉😈
3/10/23, 3:29 PM
What struck me most on this read was just what a shithead Atlas is turning out to be. He's come a long way from the "good man doing good" that Jamie first met, or thought he met. He's so cold, callous, and ruthless in what he wants to do with Jamie. Though his assessment of Jamie chasing after pleasure may not be too far off. And then there's Ambrosius, so eager to control the heroes the same way Master controls his drones. It really paints a picture of a supposedly "good" organization that at its heart is pretty much as corrupt and evil as any supervillain.

3/10/23, 3:47 PM
@[copsboy64](/user/show/910425) and what I love about what Neon Demon did is frame this in the context of, well, it's hard to explain but Master's old question of "what is better, the act of doing good or the intent of doing good" really rings true. What will Jamie pick? it's so deliciously written and planned out :flushed: :333
3/10/23, 3:37 PM
Wow. This a fantastic first chapter. I love both characters. I love Brook and all of the details about him. I love the narrator too, already. Will there be more? I really hope so.
3/10/23, 3:18 PM
This is a clever and surprising idea. 3 levels into the story now, and each decision involving the book that Xavier makes causes a split version of him but every change made by the book affects every other version of him. This is so novel and interesting and exciting. I love that it’s a choose your own adventure where I want to read every branch. Especially because they are so hot. I’m especially a fan of big dicks, so this level (3) in particular is really hot to me. Every one of the people that Xavier encountered all have big dicks and reading how he reacts to all of them is super hot. I’m excited for more and very curious how many levels you’ll do. Each one is more work if you keep up the pattern. It’s already an impressive amount of writing.
3/10/23, 2:55 PM
Holy hell, you may have outdone yourself here. The way you described the ink and metal and silicone flowing from one to the other, corrupting not only the body but the mind and even the soul. This is mastery. You should be incredibly proud of yourself here.
3/10/23, 2:27 PM
Great addition, and teasing of so much more to come! 😍
3/10/23, 1:37 PM
Can't wait to read more